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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. v. 1
In most of the countries, the government operates with revenue collected through the tax. A few people believe that they are only obliged to remit the taxes. However, others opine that they must involve in other social reforming activities to support their society. In my opinion, obeying the rules and regulations of the country is as important as paying taxes. On the one hand, except the oil-rich countries, most of the other countries run their government with revenue generated through taxes. All government policies, projects, subsidies, and schemes are funded by the money raised through tax. Even the salary of government servants is paid using these funds. Thus, it is clear that every citizen of a country must pay taxes. On the other hand, In a country, there are certain rules and regulations that every citizen must abide. If people are arrogant and fail to obey the laws, it is difficult to maintain peace and tranquility in the country. Moreover, it results in economic depression and may lead the country to civil war. For instance, the Syrian government had enough revenue from oil reserves, but people had an aggressive attitude to other country dwellers. People failed to follow the legal system and lead to civil war. Thus, the economy depressed and people are forced to move out of the country for asylum. Additionally, people can offer voluntary services in the underdeveloped regions of the country. For example, educational workshops and health camps can be organized in the remote location of the country through which they can support the government. Better education and health care system is the tool to eradicate poverty. To conclude, every citizen of the country is obliged to pay taxes. However, abiding the rules and regulations of the country is as important as paying taxes.
In most of the
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, the
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operates with revenue collected
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through
the
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tax
. A few
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people
believe that they are
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only
obliged to remit the
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taxes
.
However
, others opine that they
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must
involve in
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other
social reforming activities to support their society. In my opinion, obeying the
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rules
and regulations of the
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country
is as
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important
as paying taxes.

On the one hand, except the oil-rich
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countries
, most of the
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other
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countries
run their
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government
with revenue generated
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through
taxes.

All
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government
policies, projects, subsidies, and schemes
are funded
by the money raised
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through
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tax
. Even the salary of
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government
servants
is paid
using these funds.
Thus
, it is
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clear
that every citizen of a
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country
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must
pay taxes.

On the
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other
hand, In a
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country
, there are certain
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rules
and regulations that every citizen
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must
abide. If
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people
are arrogant and fail to obey the laws, it is difficult to maintain peace and tranquility in the
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country
.
Moreover
, it results in economic depression and may lead the
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country
to civil war.
For instance
, the Syrian
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government
had
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enough
revenue from oil reserves,
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but
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people
had an aggressive attitude to
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other
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country
dwellers.
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People
failed to follow the legal system and lead to civil war.
Thus
, the economy depressed and
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people
are forced
to
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move
out of the
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country
for asylum.
Additionally
,
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people
can offer voluntary services in the underdeveloped regions of the
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country
.
For example
, educational workshops and health camps can
be organized
in the remote location of the
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country
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through
which they can support the
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government
. Better education and health care system is the tool to eradicate poverty.

To conclude
, every citizen of the
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country
is obliged
to pay taxes.

However
, abiding the
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rules
and regulations of the
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country
is as
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important
as paying
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taxes
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
298 words
6.5
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