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Most people believe that stricter punishments should be given for traffic offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

The various measures are taken to ensure the safety of passengers on road. Although setting severe punishments for committing traffic offences would be a valuable way to increase the awareness of drivers, i believe that there are some other measures to deal with traffic violence on road. On the one hand, strict punishments, obviously, can be an effective way to reduce the number of traffic accidents on road. If people are informed that for breaking or ignoring a rule of the road can cost them a lot, the will probably begin to drive more safely. Establishing high fines or licence suspection, or even prison sentences, for example, would raise awareness among drivers, especially for dangerous ones'. As a result, by introducing stricter regulations not only negative consequences of traffic offences, such as deep injuries or in many cases death, would be overcomed, but also drivers would obey the rules more carefully. However, despite establishing harsh punishments would be reasonable approach to some extent, i think that some other methods can be implemented. Firstly, when people are receiving their driving licence, the passing driving tests should be stricter, so that they would take their driving lessons more seriously. Even though the number of people who can get licence would decrease, this in turn would have a positive influence on road safety in a way that the number of dangerous drivers would reduce; therefore, many lives would be preserved. Secondly, i also think that improving or establishing some more signs on roads would be another way to ensure the security on roads. Take as an example the speed limits on particular areas: if this signages are installed, drivers would have less problems related to finding the unknown place, thus, would be far to commit a driving offences. Instead of setting severe punishments in these situations which would be unfair, i believe it would be reasonable first to enhance the infrastructure of roads in order to provide security and demand from people to drive more carefully. In conclusion, while i can understand that harsh penalties would be valid choice in some cases, i believe that apart from it there are some other more soft measures that could be taken to guarantee the security on roads.
The various measures
are taken
to ensure the safety of passengers on
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road
. Although setting severe
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punishments
for committing
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traffic
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offences
would be a valuable way to increase the awareness of
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drivers
,
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i
believe that there are
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some
other measures to deal with
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traffic
violence on road.

On the one hand, strict
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punishments
,
obviously
, can be an effective way to
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reduce
the number of
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traffic
accidents on
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road
. If
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people
are informed
that for breaking or ignoring a
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rule
of the
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road
can cost them a lot,
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the
will
probably
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begin
to drive more
safely
. Establishing high fines or
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licence
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suspection
, or even prison sentences,
for example
, would raise awareness among
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drivers
,
especially
for
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dangerous
ones'.
As a result
, by introducing stricter regulations not
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only
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negative
consequences of
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traffic
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offences
, such as deep injuries or in
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many
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cases
death, would be
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overcomed
,
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but
also
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drivers
would obey the
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rules
more
carefully
.

However
, despite establishing harsh
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punishments
would be reasonable approach to
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some
extent,
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i
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think
that
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some
other methods can
be implemented
.
Firstly
, when
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people
are receiving their
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driving
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licence
, the passing
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driving
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tests
should be stricter,
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so
that they would take their
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driving
lessons more
seriously
.
Even though
the number of
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people
who can
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get
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licence
would decrease, this in turn would have a
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positive
influence on
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road
safety in a way that the number of
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dangerous
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drivers
would
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reduce
;
therefore
,
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many
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lives
would
be preserved
.

Secondly
,
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i
also
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think
that improving or establishing
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some
more signs on
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roads
would be another way to ensure the security on
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roads
. Take as an example the speed limits on particular areas: if
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this
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signages
are installed
,
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drivers
would have
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less
problems related to finding the unknown place,
thus
, would be far to commit a
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driving
offences.
Instead
of setting severe
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punishments
in these situations which would be unfair,
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i
believe it would be reasonable
first
to enhance the infrastructure of
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roads
in order to provide security and demand from
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people
to drive more
carefully
.

In conclusion
, while
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i
can understand that harsh penalties would be valid choice in
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some
cases,
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i
believe that apart from it there are
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some
other more soft measures that could
be taken
to guarantee the security on
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roads
.
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IELTS essay The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences.

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  American English
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372 words
6.0
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