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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food? v.1

Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food? v. 1
Shoppers now have different choices of their food products. There are also many criteria in order to select the food and each person has their own attitude towards the products they choose. A number of people buy food that suits their life style. For example, students may prefer instant foods such as breads, noodles since they are convenient and quite cheap as well. Meanwhile, well-paid workers have a tendency to pick up food from the supermarkets. Another example is that long-hour workers will choose frozen food or products that can be stored in a long time since they do not have much time for preparing meals. Meanwhile, many other people like fresh food that can be used during one day. On the other hand, quality and the origin the products are also the standard for most shoppers when they need to decide what to buy. Recently, news about dirty foodstuff and the fact that farmers are now abusing pesticide do worry buyers when they go shopping. Acknowledging that those chemicals can be the main cause for many health problems, shoppers gradually pay much attention to the origin of the food products to make sure that the food they consume is clean and hygiene. Therefore, they always come to prestigious stores for the fresh foodstuff instead of grabbing the food that has no origin. In conclusion, it seems that cost is one of the criteria but not the priority when people buy food. How and where the food is produced are the main concern for most buyers.
Shoppers
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choices of their
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food
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products
. There are
also
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many
criteria in order to select the
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food
and each person has their
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own
attitude towards the
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products
they choose.

A number of
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people
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buy
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food
that suits their life style.
For example
, students may prefer instant
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foods
such as breads, noodles since they are convenient and quite
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
as well
. Meanwhile, well-paid workers have a tendency to pick up
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
from the supermarkets. Another example is that long-hour workers will choose frozen
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food
or
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products
that can
be stored
in a long time since they do not have much time for preparing meals. Meanwhile,
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many
other
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people
like fresh
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food
that can be
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used
during one day.

On the other hand
, quality and the origin the
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products
are
also
the standard for most shoppers when they need to decide what to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
. Recently, news about dirty foodstuff and the fact that farmers are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
abusing pesticide do worry buyers when they go shopping. Acknowledging that those chemicals can be the main cause for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
health problems, shoppers
gradually
pay much attention to the origin of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
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products
to
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make
sure that the
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food
they consume is clean and hygiene.
Therefore
, they always
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come
to prestigious stores for the fresh foodstuff
instead
of grabbing the
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food
that has no origin.

In conclusion
, it seems that cost is one of the criteria
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but
not the priority when
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people
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buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
. How and where the
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food
is produced
are the main concern for most buyers.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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