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Most people are not interested how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people to buy food? v.1

Most people are not interested how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people to buy food? v. 1
In this modernized society, several changes have taken place in various fields. One of which is food. There is a wide variety of food generated. Some people think carefully what they eat and how their food has been produced. However, others are only interested in the cost of the food. As a personal opinion, I believe that how people pick food depend on many reasons. Obiviously, price plays an important role when people buy a product. In particular, most of pupils and students who have yet to be able to earn money and still receive money from their parents tend to mind how much food cost. The people who are poor often don't even get food, let alone the price of food. Therefore, for people with limited economic resources, the price of food is also a problem It is also an indubitable fact that people purchase food not only how cheap they are, they also concern about how the product is processed and packaged or more generally the quality of the product. Some parents pay attention to how the food is processed. Therefore, they will not be afraid to spend large sums of money to food from big supermarkets and shops to ensure food freshed and peace of mind when eating. Another factor that will probably influence food choices is probably the country of production. In my country, people are quiet interested in this. They often think that food imported from Europe will be of good quality and fresh. For this reason, they are willing to buy it even though it is more expensive than local products Taking all things into consideration, there is a number of reasons why people choose food. But in general, they choose food by two criteria: price and quality.
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changes
have taken place in various fields. One of which is
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food
. There is a wide variety of
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food
generated.
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Some
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people
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think
carefully
what they eat and how their
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food
has
been produced
.
However
, others are
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only
interested in the cost of the
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food
. As a personal opinion, I believe that how
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people
pick
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food
depend on
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many
reasons.

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Obiviously
,
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price
plays an
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important
role when
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people
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buy
a product.
In particular
,
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most of pupils
and students who have
yet
to be able to earn money and
still
receive money from their parents tend to mind how much
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food
cost. The
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people
who are poor
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often
don't even
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get
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food
,
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let
alone the
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price
of
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food
.
Therefore
, for
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people
with limited economic resources, the
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price
of
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food
is
also
a problem

It is
also
an indubitable fact that
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people
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purchase
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food
not
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only
how
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cheap
they are, they
also
concern about how the product
is processed
and packaged or more
generally
the quality of the product.
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Some
parents pay attention to how the
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food
is processed
.
Therefore
, they will not be afraid to spend large sums of money to
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food
from
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big
supermarkets and shops to ensure
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food
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freshed
and peace of mind when eating.

Another factor that will
probably
influence
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food
choices is
probably
the country of production. In my country,
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people
are quiet interested in this. They
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often
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think
that
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food
imported from Europe will be of
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good
quality and fresh.
For this reason
, they are willing to
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buy
it
even though
it is more expensive than local
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products


Taking all things into consideration, there is a number of reasons why
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people
choose
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food
.
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But
in general
, they choose
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food
by two criteria:
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price
and quality.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Most people are not interested how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people to buy food? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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