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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food? v.2

Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food? v. 2
Over time, everything becomes easier, including food. You can find almost any type of meal in the supermarkets at a good price, even those of your mother's meals to eat in a short break. With three euros there is a lot of choice about what to eat. However, nobody fascinates how all that is made. The ability to quickly find some good food to eat at a good price makes people blind. Whether they are workers or students, most people spend less than half the day outside the home. There is no time to go home for lunch during breaks. As a result, they prefer to buy something from the supermarket or a snack bar. That takes less time. There is no time to worry about how that food is made Also, there is quite a bit of economic thinking when choosing the food. especially the student have a limited monthly budget and they must deal with it wisely. The price then has a major impact on their choices. They would rather choose something cheaper than a luxury product. The other factor that is being considered is the values. These can be religious or personal values. For example, a Muslim from my country will only see if a product is halal. This is not taken so seriously, and it is quickly determined whether it is halal. A vegetarian will then only look for a product that is vegetable. It does not matter how it is made. It appears that most people don't take the time to think about how their food is made, as long as the prices are reasonable for a not prohibited meal to eat quickly.
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, everything becomes easier, including
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food
. You can find almost any type of meal in the supermarkets at a
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good
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price
, even those of your mother's meals to
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eat
in a short break. With three euros there is
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a lot of
choice about what to
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eat
.
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, nobody fascinates how all that
is made
. The ability to
quickly
find
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some
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good
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food
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eat
at a
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good
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price
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makes
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people
blind.

Whether they are workers or students, most
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people
spend less than half the day outside the home. There is no
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time
to go home for lunch during breaks.
As a result
, they prefer to
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buy
something from the supermarket or a snack bar. That takes less
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time
. There is no
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time
to worry about how that
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food
is
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made


Also
, there is quite a bit of economic thinking when choosing the
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food
.
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especially
the student have a limited monthly
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budget and
they
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must
deal with it
wisely
. The
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price
then has a major impact on their choices. They would
rather
choose something cheaper than a luxury product.

The other factor
that is
being considered
is the values. These can be religious or personal values.
For example
, a Muslim from my country will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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see
if a product is halal. This is not taken
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so
seriously
, and it is
quickly
determined whether it is halal. A vegetarian will then
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only
look for a product
that is
vegetable. It does not matter how it
is made
.

It appears that most
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people
don't take the
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time
to
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think
about how their
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food
is made
, as long as the
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prices
are reasonable for a not prohibited meal to
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eat
quickly
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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