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Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalization a positive or negative development? v.2

Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. v. 2
In the last few decades, we have seen a rapid advancement in technology correspondingly globalization increased dramatically across the globe. Some people say that it is for a betterment of life while some critics argue that globalization will have a negative impact on our lives. I partially agree that development has a positive impact; however, there are some drawbacks with the development. In this essay we will discuss both sides of the argument. To begin with, in the past few years we had seen how the traditional world changed into the modern world within a span of 15-20 years as an outcome many new companies had established as a result employment rate has increased steadily and huge many countries got huge revenue from these companies. For example, the famous company called coca cola had established its franchise in India in the year 1977 which provided employment opportunity for many citizens of India alongside it also helped to improve the country’s economy. Apart from this still there are many companies who established their franchise across the globe and helped to increase country’s revenue. But the flip side of a coin, in the name of maturation, many companies had effected the tradition and habituate of people in many countries across the planet, for instance the beverage company will establish their company along riverside and they use gallons of water to manufacture their product subsequently the farmers will not get sufficient water to grow their crop which affected the agriculture system in that respective area will collapse completely which will indirectly affect the habitation of village. To conclude, development of a country is very essential but we should also take care of our own culture and tradition.
In the last few decades, we have
seen
a rapid advancement in technology
correspondingly
globalization increased
dramatically
across the globe.
Some
people
say that it is for a betterment of life while
some
critics argue that globalization will have a
negative
impact on our
lives
. I
partially
agree
that development has a
positive
impact;
however
, there are
some
drawbacks with the development. In this essay we will discuss both sides of the argument.

To
begin
with, in the past few years we had
seen
how the traditional world
changed
into the modern world within a span of 15-20 years as an outcome
many
new
companies
had established
as a result
employment rate has increased
steadily
and huge
many
countries
got
huge revenue from these
companies
.
For example
, the
famous
company
called coca cola had established its franchise in India in the year 1977 which provided employment opportunity for
many
citizens of India alongside it
also
helped
to
improve
the
country’s
economy. Apart from this
still
there are
many
companies
who established their franchise across the globe and
helped
to increase
country’s
revenue.

But
the flip side of a coin, in the name of maturation,
many
companies
had effected the tradition and habituate of
people
in
many
countries
across the planet,
for instance
the beverage
company
will establish their
company
along
riverside and
they
use
gallons of water to manufacture their product
subsequently
the farmers will not
get
sufficient water to grow their crop which
affected
the agriculture system in that respective area will collapse completely which will
indirectly
affect the habitation of village.

To conclude
, development of a
country
is
very
essential
but
we should
also
take care of our
own
culture and tradition.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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