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Some people are reducing their walks, however, many health experts say that walking is the best exercise to maintain health. Why do people walk less? What might encourage people to walk longer distances? v.1

Some people are reducing their walks, however, many health experts say that walking is the best exercise to maintain health. Why do people walk less? What might encourage people to walk longer distances? v. 1
Since ancient times, the fundamental principle to remain fit and live a healthy life is in doing physical exercises regularly. These exercises not only help in attaining a good physique but it also improves the metabolism and blood circulation in the body. According to health professionals, strolling daily has a great value in maintaining health but for the past few years, few people have either reduced their walk or quit it completely. This essay will analyse what lead to this cause and what factors can encourage people to increase their walking yards. People are walking less due to many reasons but primarily it is due to the availability of transport either public or private is abundance. They believe that by using transportation they can save their valuable time. Weather also plays a significant role and people find it really hard to walk in hot, humid and extreme cold climatic conditions. Moreover, they say that due to increased rate of street crimes they have either shortened their walk or quit it completely. Furthermore, people now have access to fitness centres where they can use different equipment and machinery to walk or jog. For them walking alone on streets without a partner is a boring activity. In order to encourage and motivate people to walk more, one can make walking tracks covered with shades to reduce heat. Walking tracks should be made more beautiful by improving the landscape of the parks such that one should feel refreshing. Advertisement boards should be in place and different activities should be planned to make walking a splendid experience. The government should also hold health awareness programs and should emphasise the importance of walk. To recapitulate, the aforementioned highlights different factors resulting in reduced walk and suggested few recommendations how things can be improved. It is medically proven that walking is a very good exercise to acquire right balance in body structure and one should do it regularly.
Since ancient times, the fundamental principle to remain fit and
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live
a healthy life is in doing physical exercises
regularly
. These exercises not
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only
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help
in attaining a
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good
physique
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but
it
also
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improves
the metabolism and blood circulation in the body. According to health professionals, strolling daily has a great value in maintaining health
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but
for the past few years, few
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people
have either
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reduced
their
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walk
or quit it completely. This essay will
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analyse
what lead to this cause and what factors can encourage
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people
to increase their walking yards.

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People
are walking less due to
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many
reasons
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but
primarily
it is due to the availability of transport either public or private is abundance. They believe that by using transportation they can save their valuable time. Weather
also
plays a significant role and
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people
find it
really
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hard
to
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walk
in hot, humid and extreme
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cold
climatic conditions.
Moreover
, they say that due to increased rate of street crimes they have either shortened their
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walk
or quit it completely.
Furthermore
,
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people
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now
have access to fitness
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centres
where they can
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use
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different
equipment and machinery to
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walk
or jog. For them walking alone on streets without a partner is a boring activity.

In order to encourage and motivate
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people
to
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walk
more, one can
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make
walking
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tracks
covered with shades to
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reduce
heat. Walking
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tracks
should
be made
more
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beautiful
by improving the landscape of the parks such that one should feel refreshing. Advertisement boards should be in place and
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different
activities should
be planned
to
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make
walking a splendid experience. The
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government
should
also
hold health awareness programs and should
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emphasise
the importance of walk.

To recapitulate, the aforementioned highlights
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different
factors resulting in
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reduced
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walk
and suggested few recommendations how things can be
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improved
. It is
medically
proven that walking is a
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very
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good
exercise to acquire right balance in body structure and one should do it
regularly
.
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11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people are reducing their walks, however, many health experts say that walking is the best exercise to maintain health. Why do people walk less? What might encourage people to walk longer distances? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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