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Most of the companies use many strategies to increase their sales which are those and according to your which method is effective. v.2

Most of the companies use many strategies to increase their sales which are those and according to your which method is effective. v. 2
Nowadays, companies use various strategies to increase their sales. The most common ways such as clearance sale, lucky draw, earning reward points and SMS alert to subscribed customers. In the following passage, the above methods will be briefly explained before declaring my best choice. Many chain retail stores like Big bazar and Reliance trends stores offer huge discount sale, which provoke many youngsters to buy the garments of their wish. In addition, the buy1 and get3 offers are the most common way to target some people who wish to buy more clothes within their budget. Do the customers really benefitted by these types of sales? No. The ultimate intention of these huge offers to clear out stores outdates clothes, and to increase their sales. Therefore, the aforementioned the ways are being use by some retail store to spike profit as well as to meet the target sales. Furthermore, organization conduct festival season sale and arrange luck draw contest, this will ensure more people to buy clothes beyond their budget to meet the minimum criteria, in order to participate in the contest. For instance, Shoppers stops store has reward point system, which attract many people to buy regular commodities in their chain of stores, such initiatives have witnessed to goods sales numbers, and customers can also redeem their reward points. Moreover, SMS alert is the new trend which is being followed by new stores, this method will inform the new commodities in the store, even this can method can increase business too. Hence, it is believed above measures proved to be very effective by some famous companies. To sum up, the very famous Dubai shopping festival proves that by conducting lucky draw contest has witnessed huge sales figures, also some survey proved this is the effective method and my choice too.
Nowadays,
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companies
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use
various strategies to increase their
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sales
. The most common ways such as clearance
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sale
, lucky draw, earning reward points and SMS alert to subscribed customers. In the following passage, the above
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methods
will be
briefly
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explained
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before
declaring my best choice.

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chain retail
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stores
like
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Big
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bazar
and Reliance trends
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stores
offer huge discount
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sale
, which provoke
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many
youngsters to
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buy
the garments of their wish.
In addition
, the
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buy1
and get3 offers are the most common way to target
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some
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people
who wish to
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buy
more clothes within their budget. Do the customers
really
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benefitted
by these types of
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sales
? No. The ultimate intention of these huge offers to
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clear
out
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stores
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outdates
clothes, and to increase their
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sales
.
Therefore
, the aforementioned the ways are being
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use
by
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some
retail
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store
to spike profit
as well
as to
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meet
the target sales.

Furthermore
, organization conduct festival season
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sale
and arrange luck draw contest, this will ensure more
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people
to
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buy
clothes beyond their budget to
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meet
the minimum criteria, in order to participate in the contest.
For instance
, Shoppers
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stops
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store
has reward point system, which attract
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many
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people
to
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buy
regular commodities in their chain of
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stores
, such initiatives have witnessed to
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goods
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sales
numbers, and customers can
also
redeem their reward points.
Moreover
, SMS alert is the new trend which is
being followed
by new
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stores
, this
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method
will inform the new commodities in the
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store
, even this can
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method
can increase business too.
Hence
, it
is believed
above measures proved to be
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very
effective by
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some
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famous
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companies
.

To sum up, the
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famous
Dubai shopping festival proves that by conducting lucky draw contest has witnessed huge
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sales
figures,
also
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some
survey proved this is the effective
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method
and my choice too.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Most of the companies use many strategies to increase their sales which are those and according to your which method is effective. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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