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It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.5

It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. v. 5
People have always enjoyed reading since Biblical times. The issue whether paper books are going to disappear due to the invention of electronic gadgets is often argued. I completely disagree with this opinion and think that reading hard copy books will never become unpopular. First of all, many people love reading a paper book since it has a specific smell that an electronic gadget cannot show. The scent of a hard copy book helps a human to enjoy the process of reading while electronic devices do not own such characteristic. For example, the founder of Apple Steve Jobs had always emphasized his love for the smell of books and said that there is nothing to replace it. In other words, a lot of people prefer to read hard copy books owning to the unique book odour that electronic gadgets will never possess. In addition, electronics always require charging whereas paper books are permanently ready to use. People constantly need to charge an electronic device to be in a position to exploit it. Books do not demand charging at all. So, humans will not stop using hard copy books because unlike electronic devices, books do not require invariable charging. For instance, a contemporary author Derek Walcott does not use electronic devices for reading due to his habit of forgetting to charge electronic equipment. In that case, he prefers to bring with him paper books only. That is why the issue of charging is important for people and they will never find the substitute for hard copy books. To conclude, reading paper books is indispensable because of the distinctive odour atmosphere and such characteristic of a book that gives a person an opportunity to enjoy reading with no need of constant charging.
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People
have always enjoyed
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reading
since Biblical times. The issue whether paper
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books
are going to disappear due to the invention of
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electronic
gadgets is
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often
argued. I completely disagree with this opinion and
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think
that
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reading
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hard
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copy
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books
will never become unpopular.

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First of all
,
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many
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people
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love
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reading
a paper
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book
since it has a specific smell that an
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electronic
gadget cannot
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show
. The scent of a
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hard
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copy
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book
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helps
a human to enjoy the process of
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reading
while
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electronic
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devices
do not
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own
such characteristic.
For example
, the founder of Apple Steve Jobs had always emphasized his
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love
for the smell of
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books
and said that there is nothing to replace it.
In other words
,
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a lot of
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people
prefer to read
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hard
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copy
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books
owning to the unique
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book
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odour
that
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electronic
gadgets will never possess.

In addition
, electronics always require
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charging
whereas paper
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books
are
permanently
ready to
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use
.
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People
constantly
need to charge an
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electronic
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device
to be in a position to exploit it.
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Books
do not demand
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charging
at all.
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So
, humans will not
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stop
using
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hard
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copy
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books
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because
unlike
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electronic
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devices
,
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books
do not require invariable
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charging
.
For instance
, a contemporary author Derek
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Walcott
does not
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use
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electronic
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devices
for
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reading
due to his habit of forgetting to charge
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electronic
equipment.
In that case
, he prefers to bring with him paper
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books
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only
.
That is
why the issue of
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charging
is
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important
for
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people and
they will never find the substitute for
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hard
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copy
books.

To conclude
,
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reading
paper
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books
is indispensable
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because
of the distinctive
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odour
atmosphere and such characteristic of a
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book
that gives a person an opportunity to enjoy
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reading
with no need of constant
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charging
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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