Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Cycling is more environment friendly than other forms of transport. Why it is not popular in many places? How can its popular be increased? v.2

Cycling is more environment friendly than other forms of transport. Why it is not popular in many places? How can its popular be increased? v. 2
Cycling is a perfect exercise which enables people to be super fit and it also decrease the usage of other fuelled vehicles to a great extent. Additionally, it is considered to be the optimum solution to safeguard our environment from air pollution. However, some countries are not using this medium of transport for various reasons. In the following passage, I will explain the factors why it is not familiarised among nations and measures to improve its usage. Do some nations have a separate cycle path? No. People are hesitant to drive cycle due to unavailability of dedicated path. Most of them have a fear that they might indulge with accident while driving in congested roads. There is a sense of insecurity spread among locals that driving cycle is unsafe. For instance, in India, as statistics say, more children are being injured while driving cycles to their schools. Moreover, parking in cities is another obstacle where people have to spend more money even though it is unsecured. Furthermore, the increasing prices of bicycles are affordable to middles class people. Therefore, the above are the various causes for its unpopularity in some countries. When the government reduce the tax rate on bicycles, more youngsters will be interested to buy them and this will prevent them from obese. For example, in corporate companies they are providing cycles at discounted rates to their employees. Hence this enables them to use it for their commutation. Planning cities and towns with cycle path is an extremely intricate process, but that administration department should include this facility to their plan. Thus, it is believed, affordable pricing and sufficient parking amenities will foster people to use cycles for their commutation. To sum up, as the proverb says, “prevention is better than cure”. Youngsters should incubate the use of cycles as an integral part of their life, which will have avenue of benefit to their appearance as wells as for the environment too.
Cycling is a perfect exercise which enables
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to be super fit and it
also
decrease the usage of other fuelled vehicles to a great extent.
Additionally
, it
is considered
to be the optimum solution to safeguard our environment from air pollution.
However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries are not using this medium of transport for various reasons. In the following passage, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
the factors why it is not
Possible spelling mistake. 'familiarised' is British English.
familiarised
among nations and measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
its usage.

Do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
nations have a separate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycle
path? No.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
are hesitant to drive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycle
due to unavailability of dedicated path. Most of them have a fear that they might indulge with accident while driving in congested roads. There is a sense of insecurity spread among locals that driving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycle
is unsafe.
For instance
, in India, as statistics say, more children are
being injured
while driving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycles
to their schools.
Moreover
, parking in cities is another obstacle where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend more money
even though
it
is unsecured
.
Furthermore
, the increasing prices of bicycles are affordable to middles
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
Therefore
, the above are the various causes for its unpopularity in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries.

When the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the tax rate on bicycles, more youngsters will
be interested
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them and this will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
them from obese.
For example
, in corporate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
they are providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycles
at discounted rates to their employees.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
this enables them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it for their commutation. Planning cities and towns with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycle
path is an
extremely
intricate process,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
that administration department should include this facility to their plan.
Thus
, it
is believed
, affordable pricing and sufficient parking amenities will foster
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycles
for their commutation.

To sum up, as the proverb says, “prevention is better than cure”. Youngsters should incubate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycles
as an integral part of their life, which will have avenue of benefit to their appearance as wells as for the environment too.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Cycling is more environment friendly than other forms of transport. Why it is not popular in many places? How can its popular be increased? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts