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Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem. v.1

Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem. v. 1
The three diagrams above imply that music media develop continually. At a glance, we see some of music media were widely-used for a tiny period and became far less popular or diminished in the end such as Compact Disks, Vinyl Records and especially Cassettes. In 1990, the Compact Disk was used by the majority, but the Digital Audio took its place in 2010. The war between these two media has broken out since 2000; when the Digital Audio appeared for the first time. Due to technology explosion, Cassette no longer being demanded by 2000. The Vinyl Record totally disappeared by 2000 and sprang up again in 2010. To conclude, the Compact Disk popularity grew up by 40 percent and then fell off steeply by 60 percent. Also, there was an increase in Digital Audio use within 10 years. A sudden reappearance of Vinyl Record occurred after 20 years----between 1990 and 2010. The three diagrams above imply that music media develop continually. At a glance, we see some of music media were widely-used for a tiny period and became far less popular or diminished in the end such as Compact Disks, Vinyl Records and especially Cassettes. In 1990, the Compact Disk was used by the majority, but the Digital Audio took its place in 2010. The war between these two media has broken out since 2000; when the Digital Audio appeared for the first time. Due to technology explosion, Cassette no longer being demanded by 2000. The Vinyl Record totally disappeared by 2000 and sprang up again in 2010. To conclude, the Compact Disk popularity grew up by 40 percent and then fell off steeply by 60 percent. Also, there was an increase in Digital Audio use within 10 years. A sudden reappearance of Vinyl Record occurred after 20 years----between 1990 and 2010
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Disk
was
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the Digital Audio took its place in 2010. The war between these two
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media
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first
time. Due to technology explosion, Cassette no longer
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Record
totally
disappeared by 2000 and sprang up again in 2010.

To conclude
, the
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Compact
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popularity grew up by 40
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and then fell off
steeply
by 60
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Also
, there was an increase in Digital Audio
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within 10 years. A sudden reappearance of Vinyl
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occurred after 20 years----between 1990 and 2010.

The three diagrams above imply that
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music
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media
develop
continually
. At a glance, we
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see
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some
of
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music
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were
widely
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used
for a tiny period and became far less popular or diminished in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
such as
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Compact
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Disks
, Vinyl
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Records
and
especially
Cassettes.

In 1990, the
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Compact
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Disk
was
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used
by the majority,
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but
the Digital Audio took its place in 2010. The war between these two
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media
has broken out since 2000; when the Digital Audio appeared for the
first
time. Due to technology explosion, Cassette no longer
being demanded
by 2000. The Vinyl
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Record
totally
disappeared by 2000 and sprang up again in 2010.

To conclude
, the
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Compact
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Disk
popularity grew up by 40
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percent
and then fell off
steeply
by 60
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percent
.
Also
, there was an increase in Digital Audio
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use
within 10 years. A sudden reappearance of Vinyl
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Record
occurred after 20 years----between 1990 and 2010
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem. v. 1

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