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The rising levels of traffic congestion in many big cities around the world can cause the decline in the quality of life in cities. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them? v.1

The rising levels of traffic congestion in many big cities around the world can cause the decline in the quality of life in cities. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them? v. 1
Increasing traffic congestion is an inescapable condition in large and growing metropolitan areas across the world. Over recent years, this problem has become one of the most pressing issues because it has profoundly affected the lives of individuals especially in many big cities. The following paragraphs will examine the causes of traffic congestion and recommend some practical solutions that can be taken into account. Traffic congestion is caused by many reasons. One of the major reasons is the rising number of vehicles on roads caused by the higher number of population and the development of economy. In other words, with the economic development in big cities, a lot of people from rural areas move to cities and many of them including urban people want their own personal transport to help them commute conveniently. As the number of cars rises, the chance of congestion also increases. Another reason is that public transportation facilities in some cities such as Bangkok and Manila are inadequate and poorly managed; therefore, people choose to drive their own cars. To solve this problem, there are several things that the government could do. Firstly, the state government should provide convenient, safe and clean public transport facilities in order to encourage people to leave their cars at homes and use public transports instead. Secondly, roads and highways should be expanded to support the increasing number of vehicles. In addition, the government could promote carpool and provide bicycle lane which can bring a lot of benefits for the people and the city in terms of reducing traffic and pollution. Finally, the government should develop new industrial and commercial areas outside the city so that people could move to these areas. This can help reduce the density problem in metropolitan areas. In conclusion, traffic congestion is mainly caused by a dramatic rise of the car users and poor public transportation. The government and public should cooperate to solve this problem in a long term by reducing number of vehicles and using more public transport.
Increasing
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traffic
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congestion
is an inescapable condition in large and growing metropolitan
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areas
across the world. Over recent years, this
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problem
has become one of the most pressing issues
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because
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affected
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lives
of individuals
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many
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big
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cities
. The following paragraphs will examine the causes of
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traffic
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congestion
and recommend
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some
practical solutions that can
be taken
into account.

Traffic
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congestion
is caused
by
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many
reasons. One of the major reasons is the rising
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number
of vehicles on roads caused by the higher
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number
of population and the development of economy.
In other words
, with the economic development in
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big
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cities
,
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a lot of
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people
from rural
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areas
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move
to
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cities
and
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many
of them including urban
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people
want their
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own
personal
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transport
to
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help
them commute
conveniently
. As the
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number
of cars rises, the chance of
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congestion
also
increases. Another reason is that
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public
transportation facilities in
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some
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cities
such as Bangkok and Manila are inadequate and
poorly
managed;
therefore
,
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people
choose to drive their
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own
cars.

To solve this
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problem
, there are several things that the
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government
could do.
Firstly
, the state
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government
should provide convenient, safe and clean
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public
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transport
facilities in order to encourage
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people
to
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leave
their cars at homes and
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use
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public
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transports
instead
.
Secondly
, roads and highways should
be expanded
to support the increasing
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number
of vehicles.
In addition
, the
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government
could promote carpool and provide bicycle lane which can bring
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a lot of
benefits for the
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people
and the city in terms of reducing
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traffic
and pollution.
Finally
, the
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government
should develop new industrial and commercial
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areas
outside the city
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so
that
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people
could
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move
to these areas.

This can
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help
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reduce
the density
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problem
in metropolitan
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areas
.
In conclusion
,
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traffic
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congestion
is
mainly
caused by a dramatic rise of the car users and poor
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public
transportation. The
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government
and
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public
should cooperate to solve this
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problem
in a long term by reducing
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number
of vehicles and using more
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public
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transport
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The rising levels of traffic congestion in many big cities around the world can cause the decline in the quality of life in cities. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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