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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percent of these positions to women. do you agree? v.6

Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percent of these positions to women. do you agree? v. 6
In a male dominated society, females have to fight for their rights. Although more than fifty person of the employees are women, the highest posts are mainly occupied by men in the in the developed countries. There should be a justifiable way to distribute these positions equally in both genders. I strongly agree with this statement. In the developed countries, however the women are equally competent as men, due to gender discrimination, they are not motivated and appreciated for their work. Moreover, take an example of any field, more than 50% of their lower staff consists of females. For instance, the hospitals are run by a male administrator, on the contrary, the working doctors and nurses are mostly women. Therefore, the females are not considered suitable for leading positions. In todays world of revolution, it is an utmost important to change the typical mindset. The companies should be held responsible to allocate the fixed percentage of positions to females only, because if they are capable enough to work on lower positions, they can take over the responsibility of higher posts as well. For instance, my mother was a school teacher for fifteen years, after that she was offered a post of Principal which she managed properly and is considered as the best principal, up to date. To conclude, more women work on junior levels than men because they are not promoted to senior posts. I agree with the aforementioned suggestion that certain percentage should be kept reserved for women in leading positions, in all the companies.
In a male dominated society,
females
have to
fight for their rights. Although more than fifty
person
of the employees are
women
, the highest
posts
are
mainly
occupied by
men
in the in the
developed countries
. There should be a justifiable way to distribute these
positions
equally
in both genders. I
strongly
agree
with this statement.

In the
developed countries
,
however
the
women
are
equally
competent as
men
, due to gender discrimination, they are not motivated and appreciated for their work.
Moreover
, take an example of any field, more than 50% of their lower staff consists of
females
.
For instance
, the hospitals
are run
by a male administrator,
on the contrary
, the working doctors and nurses are
mostly
women
.
Therefore
, the
females
are not considered suitable for leading positions.

In
todays
world of revolution, it is an utmost
important
to
change
the typical mindset. The
companies
should
be held
responsible to allocate the
fixed
percentage of
positions
to
females
only
,
because
if they are capable
enough
to work on lower
positions
, they can take over the responsibility of higher
posts
as well
.
For instance
, my mother was a school teacher for fifteen years, after that she
was offered
a
post
of Principal which she managed
properly
and
is considered
as the best principal, up to date.

To conclude
, more
women
work on junior levels than
men
because
they are not promoted to senior
posts
. I
agree
with the aforementioned suggestion that certain percentage should be
kept
reserved for
women
in leading
positions
, in all the
companies
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percent of these positions to women. do you agree? v. 6

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  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
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