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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of the argument and then give your opinion. v.19

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. v. 19
Technological advancement has infiltrated all spheres of life, including education. It is believed by some that the increasing use of computers for learning is a positive development, while others hold the view that it has more negative repercussions. In my opinion, although some of its effects may be detrimental, I consider its role in education as a plus. On the one hand, supporters of the view that the employment of computers for use in academic settings causes more harm than good believe so because of the over-reliance on this mode of learning. In other words, learners surfing the internet for every topic are at the risk of dormancy by not tasking their brains. Also, they believe that when used, for instance, in elementary and secondary schools, it reduces the need to develop certain skills which were important in the past such as good handwriting. As a result of this, they consider the application of computers in schools as dangerous to learning. However, I agree that there are more upsides to their usage. Firstly, their functions result in convenience. In other words, students who have to work to pay tuition fees can learn at their own pace while also trying to raise funds for their academics. Additionally, the use of computer and other technology permits distance learning. For example, in several countries of the world, it is increasingly seen to take master's courses and obtain a degree without reporting to a physical building of a university. Furthermore, the internet also provides articles and journals that may be used and cited in different course works without going through the frantic search for books in libraries. Thus, it has been beneficial to the field of academics. In conclusion, while it may be said that the advent of computers and its increasing role in education causes negative effects, I strongly believe that it has done more good. It is hoped that its use will continue to be of importance.
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is believed
by
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some
that the increasing
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use
of computers for learning is a
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positive
development, while others hold the view that it has more
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negative
repercussions. In my opinion, although
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some
of its effects may be detrimental, I consider its role in education as a plus.

On the one hand, supporters of the view that the employment of computers for
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use
in academic settings causes more harm than
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good
believe
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so
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because
of the over-reliance on this mode of learning. In
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other
words, learners surfing the internet for every topic are at the
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risk
of dormancy by not tasking their brains.
Also
, they believe that when
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used
,
for instance
, in elementary and secondary schools, it
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reduces
the need to develop certain
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skills
which were
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important
in the past such as
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good
handwriting.
As a result
of this, they consider the application of computers in schools as
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dangerous
to learning.

However
, I
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agree
that there are more upsides to their usage.
Firstly
, their functions result in convenience. In
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
words, students who
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work to pay tuition fees can learn at their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
pace while
also
trying to raise funds for their academics.
Additionally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of computer and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
technology permits distance learning.
For example
, in several countries of the world, it is
increasingly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
to take master's courses and obtain a degree without reporting to a physical building of a university.
Furthermore
, the internet
also
provides articles and journals that may be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
and cited in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
course works without going through the frantic search for books in libraries.
Thus
, it has been beneficial to the field of academics.

In conclusion
, while it may
be said
that the advent of computers and its increasing role in education causes
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negative
effects, I
strongly
believe that it has done more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. It
is hoped
that its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
will continue to be of importance.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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