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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. v. 5
Owing to the problem with a high-level position in companies filled with men meanwhile the workforce contains m mmore than 50 percent of femlae, some people think that the best way to resolve this is by allocating a percentage this position to women. I completely agree that it is the best accurate way to tackle women low placement of standards in the work environment. Firstly, High level companies offices is occupied by men meanwhile, the workforce area has more than 50 percent of women. In most civilized and modernized organizations people believe that the mangerial role should be given to men and women will work as subordinates to follow all the commands ordered by men. This problem is best solved by allowing women to take up top offices where they can actualize their potentiala to the fullest. At the moment, A media company in the east, employed More females than male because they are more outspoken, active and resilience. However, By subsequent distribution of a quota of positions to women, it will enhance productivity and ideas in handling a task. Another points to consider, peak areas of a company is given to men, although they are totally out numbered by women. some believe women should not be elevated to upto a male level in office because of disrespect. this issues can be put under control by allowing women take part in the areas of decision making which will further foster their capabilities. for example, more than 10, 000 female nurses are employed in an hospital than male each year in my country because of their high demands, some manager stated that this is because of their tender care, coupled with skills, characters, and Industrialized personality. moreover, By allowing women to attain a certain level also will lead to a sense of achievement and belongings. In conclusion, To deal with cases of high level companies giving men position while women take the lesser level is by changing companies perspective, organising workshops to proof women worth and abilities.
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companies
filled with
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men
meanwhile the workforce contains
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than 50 percent of
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femlae
,
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some
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people
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think
that the best way to resolve this is by allocating a percentage this
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position
to
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women
. I completely
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agree
that it is the best accurate way to tackle
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women
low placement of standards in the work environment.

Firstly
, High
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level
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companies
offices
is occupied
by
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men
meanwhile, the workforce area has more than 50 percent of
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women
. In most civilized and modernized organizations
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people
believe that the
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mangerial
role should be
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given
to
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men
and
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women
will work as subordinates to follow all the commands ordered by
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men
. This problem is best solved by allowing
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women
to take up top offices where they can actualize their
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potentiala
to the fullest. At the moment, A media
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company
in the east, employed

More females than male
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because
they are more outspoken, active and resilience.
However
, By subsequent distribution of a quota of
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positions
to
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women
, it will enhance productivity and
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ideas
in handling a task.

Another points to consider, peak areas of a
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company
is
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given
to
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men
, although they are
totally
out numbered by
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women
.
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some
believe
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women
should not
be elevated
to
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upto
a male
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level
in office
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because
of disrespect.
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this
issues can
be put
under control by allowing
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women
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take part
in the areas of
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decision making
which will
further
foster their capabilities.
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for
example, more than 10, 000 female nurses
are employed
in
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hospital than male each year in my country
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because
of their high demands,
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some
manager stated that this is
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because
of their tender care, coupled with
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skills
, characters, and Industrialized personality.
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moreover
, By allowing
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women
to attain a certain
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level
also
will lead to a sense of achievement and belongings.

In conclusion
, To deal with cases of high
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level
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companies
giving
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men
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position
while
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women
take the lesser
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level
is by changing
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companies
perspective,
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organising
workshops to proof
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women
worth and abilities.
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IELTS essay Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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