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Most companies and organizations required their employees to wear uniform to work. What are the jobs that need this uniform to make it a good thing? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniforms to work? v.1

Most companies and organizations required their employees to wear uniform to work. What are the jobs that need this uniform to make it a good thing? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniforms to work? v. 1
Nowadays, it is often argued that what should be the proper attire in offices. Many workplaces have set rules and guidelines for compulsory uniform that staffs have to wear at work. In this essay, I am going to explore, what makes wearing particular uniform at work advantageous, and some of the drawbacks related to these dresses at work. One major positive aspect of wearing designated attire to offices is that it reflects professionalism. It's not only eye-appealing to customers, but also contemplate as part of work ethics. In addition to this, it also helps in defining the hierarchy of workplace. For example, in hospitals, doctors and nurses wearing uniforms help patients to identify the right person whom they have to contact. Furthermore, in some of the organizations these uniforms act as protective gears for the people who wear them. To illustrate this, in hotels, chefs wear chef coats as it guards them against fire. Nevertheless, a notable drawback of these mandatory uniforms is that people get tired of their daily dress-ups. As mentioned before, there are some professions which have defined set of dress to work for their staff, abiding to such rules on a daily basis may become boring for some. Additionally, another aspect to consider is that who is responsible for the maintenance of those uniforms. For example, in some companies, staffs have to take care of their laundry and repair of their own, this could be a downside for these individuals. To sum up, while there are some benefits of conforming the regulations of uniforms to work, however, there are some disadvantages related to it as well. Therefore, it is important to contemplate a viable approach to it.
Nowadays, it is
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argued that what should be the proper attire in offices.
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workplaces have set
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rules
and guidelines for compulsory
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that staffs
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have to
wear at
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work
. In this essay, I am going to explore, what
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at
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advantageous, and
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some of the
drawbacks related to these dresses at work.

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aspect of wearing designated attire to offices is that it reflects professionalism. It's not
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ethics.
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in defining the hierarchy of workplace.
For example
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uniforms
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help
patients to identify the right person whom they
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contact.
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, in
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some of the
organizations these
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act as protective gears for the
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people
who wear them. To illustrate this, in hotels, chefs wear chef coats as it guards them against fire.

Nevertheless
, a notable drawback of these mandatory
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uniforms
is that
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people
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tired of their daily dress-ups. As mentioned
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, there are
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professions which have defined set of dress to
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for their staff, abiding to such
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rules
on a daily basis may become boring for
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.
Additionally
, another aspect to consider is that who is responsible for the maintenance of those
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uniforms
.
For example
, in
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companies
, staffs
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, this could be a downside for these individuals.

To sum up, while there are
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some
benefits of conforming the regulations of
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uniforms
to
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,
however
, there are
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disadvantages related to it
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to contemplate a viable approach to it.
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IELTS essay Most companies and organizations required their employees to wear uniform to work. What are the jobs that need this uniform to make it a good thing? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniforms to work? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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