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More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people think that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.3

More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people think that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. 3
Nowadays, worldwide organizations like WHO, UNICEF and so on help other developing nations and even poorer countries. Some people consider, monetary aid is better than technical aid. In my opinion, both of them are really crucial and also this essay will discuss on both views. Firstly, if I want to analyse financial assistance to developing countries, I would say that these countries need to start a project or finish the other ones. In order to do this, they need to pay their staff. In fact, improving economy of a country needs balance between payments and prices. If the government increases their prices in order to pay their staff, is not a good strategy. So sometimes monetary help is better than practical one. But, this kind of help may raise corruption in government and spend it on the own works. On the other hand, developing countries need more instruments, companies and developed systems to improve. For instance, better transportation systems or health care machines or moreover, they may need guidance from some expert specialists to launch or continue a plan. Though, advice or technical assistance is indispensable but, there are some problems may face. For example, transporting instruments from country to country, they may hurt during this journey. To sum up, international agencies should consider every aspect and then decide whether monetary, practical or advice aid will help. In addition, they observe each process and make sure everything is going well. I strongly believe, both points of views are equally required and essential and choosing one of them for help depends on organizations and also their policies.
Nowadays, worldwide organizations like WHO, UNICEF and
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other developing nations and even poorer
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countries
.
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people
consider, monetary aid is better than technical aid. In my opinion, both of them are
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crucial and
also
this essay will discuss on both views.

Firstly
, if I want to
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analyse
financial assistance to developing
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countries
, I would say that these
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countries
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need
to
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start
a project or finish the other ones. In order to do this, they
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need
to pay their staff. In fact, improving economy of a
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country
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needs
balance between payments and prices. If the
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government
increases their prices in order to pay their staff, is not a
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good
strategy.
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sometimes
monetary
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help
is better than practical one.
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But
, this kind of
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help
may raise corruption in
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government
and spend it on the
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own
works.

On the other hand
, developing
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countries
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need
more instruments,
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companies
and developed systems to
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improve
.
For instance
, better transportation systems or health care machines or
moreover
, they may
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need
guidance from
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some
expert specialists to launch or continue a plan. Though, advice or technical assistance is indispensable
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but
, there are
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some
problems may face.
For example
, transporting instruments from
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country
to
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country
, they may hurt during this journey.

To sum up, international agencies should consider every aspect and then decide whether monetary, practical or advice aid will
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help
.
In addition
, they observe each process and
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make
sure everything is going well. I
strongly
believe, both points of views are
equally
required and essential and choosing one of them for
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help
depends on organizations and
also
their policies.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people think that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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