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More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. v. 4
People are calling into question the importance of aid. Nowadays, many world wide organisations are providing financial assistance to developing countries and their citizens. While a group of people advocates that financial support is required, others assert that technical help Such as advice would be more profitable. Both sides of argument present rational ideas, which will be elaborated. On the one hand, there are specific root causes behind this fact that Why monetary help is valuable for developing countries and their nations. To begin with, many emerging countries are struggling with the problems related to basic infrastructure like road, railways and public transportation. A result, they need financial backing from external organizations to help them complete unfinished projects. A number of underdeveloped and developed countries, furthermore, fail to provide basic amenities to their citizens. For instance, people living in poor countries deprived of basic needs such as, food, water or health services. On the other hand, others put forward the argument that financial aid alone will not be helpful. Nowadays Progressing countries are facing demanding circumstances like corruption, scams, etc. It would be remarkably helpful If they were able to get some down-to-earth support and advice to both cope with their predicaments and boost their economy. To be concluded, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, international organizations should help developing countries grow by equipping financial supports. Nevertheless, I opine that it is fundamentally significant to contribute some judicious advice in order to help them overcome their problems.
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help
Such as advice would be more profitable. Both sides of argument present rational
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ideas
, which will
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.

On the one hand, there are specific root causes behind this fact that Why monetary
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help
is valuable for developing
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countries
and their nations. To
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begin
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emerging
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countries
are struggling with the problems related to basic infrastructure like road, railways and public transportation.

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financial
backing from external
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organizations
to
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help
them complete unfinished projects. A number of underdeveloped and developed
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countries
,
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, fail to provide basic amenities to their citizens.
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people
living in poor
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deprived of basic needs such as, food, water or health services.
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financial
aid alone will not be helpful. Nowadays Progressing
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countries
are facing demanding circumstances like corruption, scams, etc. It would be
remarkably
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get
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some
down-to-earth support and advice to both cope with their predicaments and boost their economy.

To
be concluded
, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to
be drawn
is that, international
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organizations
should
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help
developing
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countries
grow by equipping
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financial
supports.
Nevertheless
, I opine that it is
fundamentally
significant to contribute
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some
judicious advice in order to
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help
them overcome their problems.
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IELTS essay More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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