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More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important Discuss both views and g v.2

More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important 2
In today’s society, some recruiters favour candidates who have formal academic qualifications over those with only life experience or good personality traits. This essay will look at some causes of this and I personally believe that this trend is totally negative. There are a number of reasons why some employers think that academic degrees are more important than work experience or personal qualities when they seek new staff. Firstly, they believe that candidates with an academic qualification are equipped with in-depth knowledge and useful skills which are necessary for their future jobs. As a result, these people could make greater contributions to their company than those without any formal qualifications. In addition, a student has to devote a lot of time and effort to his or her study in order to get a university qualification, which can somehow prove that this student is a hard-working and persevering person. In my opinion, this trend has many adverse effects. Many people who have various degrees still face difficulties dealing with their clients because of a lack of necessary skills and experience. This could not only negatively affect their work, but also cause their company to lose loyal customers. In addition, life experience helps people to deal with difficult situations more effectively, which helps improve work productivity. Personal qualities are also an essential factor that needs to be taken into account. Negative personalities such as dishonesty in the workplace, for example, could pose a serious threat to the development of any companies. In conclusion, there are various reasons why some employers prefer people with academic qualifications rather than those who only have life experience or good personalities and I think that it is a negative development.
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recruiters
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candidates who have formal
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academic
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qualifications
over those with
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only
life
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experience
or
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good
personality traits. This essay will look at
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some
causes of this and I
personally
believe that this trend is
totally
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negative
.

There are a number of reasons why
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some
employers
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think
that
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academic
degrees are more
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important
than work
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experience
or personal qualities when they seek new staff.
Firstly
, they believe that candidates with an
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academic
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qualification
are equipped
with in-depth knowledge and useful
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skills
which are necessary for their future jobs.
As a result
, these
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people
could
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make
greater contributions to their
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company
than those without any formal
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qualifications
.
In addition
, a student
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has to
devote
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a lot of
time and effort to
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his or her
study in order to
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get
a university
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qualification
, which can somehow prove that this student is a
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hard
-working and persevering person.

In my opinion, this trend has
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many
adverse effects.
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people
who have various degrees
still
face difficulties dealing with their clients
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because
of a lack of necessary
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skills
and
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experience
. This could not
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only
negatively
affect their work,
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also
cause their
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company
to lose loyal customers.
In addition
, life
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experience
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helps
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people
to deal with difficult situations more
effectively
, which
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helps
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improve
work productivity. Personal qualities are
also
an essential factor that needs to
be taken
into account.
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Negative
personalities such as dishonesty in the workplace,
for example
, could pose a serious threat to the development of any
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companies
.

In conclusion
, there are various reasons why
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some
employers prefer
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people
with
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academic
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qualifications
rather
than those who
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only
have life
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experience
or
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good
personalities and I
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think
that it is a
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negative
development.
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IELTS essay More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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