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More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science. Why is this happening? What are the effects of this? v.2

More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science. Why is this happening? What are the effects of this? v. 2
Most students at university nowadays rarely choose science faculty. There are more reasons why no selected this subject. This issue occurs cause in Thailand at the current no enough salary and welfare. Decreasing choice science can reduce the worker who professes this role. This essay will consider this point. Currently, many students who will study college do not select science. First of all, learners who study science must have good scores to enter college. Therefore, this condition makes students study hard and spend money a lot to take extra tutorial classes. Science faculty spends time to learning more than other majors. Moreover, Scientists, doctors or engineers do not have good salaries and welfare. Next, more students choose other subjects because it is easy to find careers and study not hard. For example, social socializing in the future, possibly makes easy work and money, such as blogger, drop shipper and online. In addition, postgraduate students do not work with science, it can increase people deficient in this career. It can have many problems, for example, Thailand and other countries encounter issues about viruses. Thus, doctors and scientists are important for helping and protecting citizens. To conclude, it can be seen that there are many reasons why nowadays more students do not choose science to study. As mentioned above, sciences are difficult to learn and spend more time than other major. Welfare and salary are not worth studying when compared with other occupations. The government should pay attention to this condition because this career is essential for the country.
Most
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students
at university nowadays rarely choose
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science
faculty. There are more reasons why
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no
selected this subject. This issue occurs cause in Thailand at the
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current
no
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enough
salary and welfare. Decreasing choice
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science
can
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reduce
the worker who professes this role. This essay will consider this point.

Currently
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many
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students
who will
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study
college do not select
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science
.
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, learners who
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study
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science
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must
have
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good
scores to enter college.
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makes
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students
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study
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hard
and spend money a lot to take extra tutorial classes.
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Science
faculty spends time to learning more than
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other
majors.
Moreover
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good
salaries and welfare.
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students
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subjects
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not
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hard
.
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easy work and money, such as blogger, drop shipper and online.

In addition
, postgraduate
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students
do not work with
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science
, it can increase
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people
deficient in this career. It can have
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many
problems,
for example
, Thailand and
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other
countries encounter issues about viruses.
Thus
, doctors and scientists are
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important
for helping and protecting citizens.

To conclude
, it can be
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seen
that there are
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reasons why nowadays more
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students
do not choose
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science
to
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study
. As mentioned above,
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sciences
are difficult to learn and spend more time than
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other
major. Welfare and salary are not worth studying when compared with
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other
occupations. The
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government
should pay attention to this condition
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because
this career is essential for the country.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science. Why is this happening? What are the effects of this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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