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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks? v.4

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks? v. 4
What are the outstanding advantages of education in developing countries that can attract many students to go to class oversea nowadays? It is true that the number of students who choose to research out of the country has increased rapidly in the last few years. There are some negative and positive, for the student when they study in the far their home. I personally believe that the advantages have more outweigh the downside. On the one hand, there are justifiable reasons that studying abroad has some disadvantages. Primarily, studying abroad will have cost a fortune. Indeed, their parent is imperative to pay huge money for tuition and living expenses compared to their home town. Moreover, they probably get a problem with new cultures. In other words, they are necessary to spend much time researching new customs and new languages. Therefore, studying in other countries has some uncomfortable things for a student. On the other hand, the majority of people believe that studying oversea brings a lot of positive aspects to the student themselves. First and foremost, qualifications gained abroad can open doors to better job opportunities. Obviously, those who have international qualifications be always hunted by big corporations. Additionally, the best universities employ lecturers who are experts in their fields. In this way, they can exploit all the in-depth knowledge of the specialized they are studying. Hence, studying university or college oversea has a lot of positive for students. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the preference for studying in a foreign country has its own benefits and drawbacks. Despite all the disadvantages, I believe that it has more advantages for the students themselves. Currently, many developed countries have expanded the tuition waiver policy for international students. I believe that will attract more students to study abroad in the future.
What are the outstanding advantages of education in developing
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to go to
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class
oversea nowadays? It is true that the number of
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students
who choose to research out of the
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country
has increased
rapidly
in the last few years. There are
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some
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negative
and
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positive
, for the
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student
when they study in the far their home. I
personally
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believe
that the advantages have more outweigh the downside.

On the one hand, there are justifiable reasons that
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studying
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abroad
has
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some
disadvantages.

Primarily
,
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studying
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abroad
will have cost a fortune.
Indeed
, their parent is imperative to pay huge money for tuition and living expenses compared to their home town.
Moreover
, they
probably
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get
a problem with new cultures.
In other words
, they are necessary to spend much time researching new customs and new languages.
Therefore
,
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studying
in other
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countries
has
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some
uncomfortable things for a student.

On the other hand
, the majority of
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people
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believe
that
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oversea brings
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a lot of
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positive
aspects to the
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student
themselves.
First
and foremost, qualifications gained
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abroad
can open doors to better job opportunities.
Obviously
, those who have international qualifications be always hunted by
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big
corporations.
Additionally
, the best universities employ lecturers who are experts in their fields. In this way, they can exploit all the in-depth knowledge of the specialized they are
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studying
.
Hence
,
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studying
university or college oversea has
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a lot of
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positive
for students.

In conclusion
, it is undeniable that the preference for
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studying
in a foreign
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country
has its
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own
benefits and drawbacks. Despite all the disadvantages, I
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believe
that it has more advantages for the
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students
themselves.
Currently
,
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many
developed
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countries
have expanded the tuition waiver policy for international
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students
. I
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believe
that will attract more
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students
to study
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abroad
in the future.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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