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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? v.13

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. with the above statement? v. 13
Most people agree that there are worldwide traffic and pollution problems that need to be solved. Some people think that a potential solution to these problems is raising the price of petrol. In my opinion, while this may temporarily solve these issues, such a price increase would have many side effects and thus other solutions would be much more desirable. Increasing the price of petrol by a large amount would likely help the aforementioned problems because a higher price would lower the demand for petrol. However, this would create a price shock with many undesirable side effects. For example, the price of everyday goods would increase because companies rely on the shipping industry to transport them to the marketplace. If petrol prices went up, shipping costs would go up simultaneously. This would make everything more expensive. Businesses would lose either customers who were unwilling to buy goods at the higher price, or would need to reduce their profit margins. This could have a ripple effect on the global economy and even send it into a depression. Instead of increasing the price of petrol, the best alternative measures are focusing on technologies that can reduce the need for transportation. With further improvements in communications technology, people would be able to work more effectively from home. This would lessen the use of automobiles for everyday required transportation as well as the pollution and traffic congestion resulting from it. In addition, investing in renewable energy technology could help us to improve transportation systems in a way that has a weaker environmental impact. Improvements in electric cars, for example, would be a better long-term solution than simply increasing the price of petrol. Overall, while the growing traffic and pollution problems are certainly note-worthy and we should do our best to combat them, I believe that focusing on alternative measures like communication technology and renewable energy technology will certainly be more effective in the long run.
Most
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people
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agree
that there are worldwide traffic and pollution
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problems
that need to
be solved
.
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Some
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people
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think
that a potential solution to these
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problems
is raising the
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price
of
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petrol
. In my opinion, while this may
temporarily
solve these issues, such a
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price
increase would have
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many
side effects and
thus
other solutions would be much more desirable.

Increasing the
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price
of
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petrol
by a large amount would likely
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help
the aforementioned
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problems
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because
a higher
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price
would lower the demand for
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petrol
.
However
, this would create a
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price
shock with
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many
undesirable side effects.
For example
, the
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price
of everyday
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goods
would increase
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because
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companies
rely on the shipping industry to transport them to the marketplace. If
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petrol
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prices
went up, shipping costs would go up
simultaneously
. This would
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make
everything more expensive. Businesses would lose either customers who were unwilling to
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buy
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goods
at the higher
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price
, or would need to
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reduce
their profit margins. This could have a ripple effect on the global economy and even
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send
it into a depression.

Instead
of increasing the
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price
of
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petrol
, the best alternative measures are focusing on
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technologies
that can
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reduce
the need for transportation. With
further
improvements in communications
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technology
,
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people
would be able to work more
effectively
from home. This would lessen the
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use
of automobiles for
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
required transportation
as well
as the pollution and traffic congestion resulting from it.
In addition
, investing in renewable energy
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technology
could
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help
us to
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improve
transportation systems in a way that has a weaker environmental impact. Improvements in electric cars,
for example
, would be a better long-term solution than
simply
increasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
of petrol.

Overall
, while the growing traffic and pollution
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problems
are
certainly
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note-worthy and
we should do our best to combat them, I believe that focusing on alternative measures like communication
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technology
and renewable energy
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technology
will
certainly
be more effective in the long run.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. with the above statement? v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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