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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback v.2

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback v. 2
It is true that the number of students who choose to study overseas has increased rapidly in the past few years. Studying in a foreign country has its own positive and negative sides, but I personally believe that it has more benefits for the students themselves. On the one hand, some believe that the choice of studying abroad have some disadvantages. One of the reasons is that studying overseas will cost more than studying in the home country. It is necessary for parents to spend more money on airplane tickets, accommodations, foods and clothes, besides tuition fees and uniforms. Another reason is that students might be unfamiliar and uncomfortable with the culture, environment and language of the new country. As a consequence, it might have a negative effect on their mental condition and academic performance. Adopting in a new environment often hampers the natural flow of study for many students and some students do not continue their study to earn money when they are abroad. On the other hand, another group of people think that studying in another country brings so many positive aspects for the students themselves. Firstly, by studying in a new country, students will have a chance to learn new languages and new cultures. Secondly, students will learn about how to live independently, like cleaning their own rooms or doing the laundry by themselves. Thirdly, they could make new friends with people from other countries and get familiar with multicultural environments. Lastly, it is a fact that in certain countries, international graduate certificate gives additional values when the students search for jobs. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the preference of studying in a foreign country has its own benefits and drawbacks. Despite all the disadvantages, I believe that it has more advantages for the students themselves, therefore young people should be encouraged to study in a new country. Although some of them might have difficulties with the fees, but many international scholarships are offered these days.
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students
themselves.

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believe that the choice of
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studying
abroad have
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some
disadvantages. One of the reasons is that
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studying
overseas will cost more than
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studying
in the home
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country
. It is necessary for parents to spend more money on airplane tickets, accommodations, foods and clothes,
besides
tuition fees and uniforms. Another reason is that
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students
might be unfamiliar and uncomfortable with the culture, environment and language of the
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new
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country
. As a consequence, it might have a
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negative
effect on their mental condition and academic performance. Adopting in a
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new
environment
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often
hampers the natural flow of
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and
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do not continue their
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to earn money when they are abroad.

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, another group of
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aspects for the
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students
themselves.
Firstly
, by
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studying
in a
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new
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country
,
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students
will have a chance to learn
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new
languages and
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new
cultures.
Secondly
,
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students
will learn about how to
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live
independently
, like cleaning their
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rooms or doing the laundry by themselves.
Thirdly
, they could
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new
friends with
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people
from other
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countries
and
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familiar with multicultural environments.
Lastly
, it is a fact that in certain
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countries
, international graduate certificate gives additional values when the
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students
search for jobs.

In conclusion
, it is undeniable that the preference of
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studying
in a foreign
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country
has its
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own
benefits and drawbacks. Despite all the disadvantages, I believe that it has more advantages for the
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students
themselves,
therefore
young
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people
should
be encouraged
to
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study
in a
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country
. Although
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some
of them might have difficulties with the fees,
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but
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many
international scholarships
are offered
these days.
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37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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