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More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.2

More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 2
There has been a growing trend toward purchasing garments, vehicles, and accessories from expensive brand names for a variety of reasons these days. Although this issue might not be of significant concerns of society, spending money for these external materials is fraught with pitfalls and its reasons should be identified in order to find solutions. There are several causes why people nowadays are driven to buy luxury products. First, since high-priced products are usually of good quality, many people, especially successful millennials, tend to spend a considerable amount of money for these goods. For example, the likelihood of a leather hand-made bag to last for a long time is significantly higher than an inexpensive one coming from a flea market as the materials that are used would usually be ensured in both quality and durability. Second, having expensive brand names is considered a must to express individuality and status. This means that society could easily associate owning an expensive item with a successful figure since only the wealthy ones could afford these items, which is highly beneficial in expanding relationship networks. In fact, it cannot be denied that overbuying famous brand products, such as clothes, towels and tooth paste may have some drawbacks. These daily necessities are easy to worn or use up and the quality of cheap necessities is similar to that expensive goods. Even buying famous brand products all the time may cause children’s bad style of life. Moreover, real and excellent famous brands are limited, while with more and more people choose to buy famous brands goods, sellers make use of high technology producing some fake famous brand products to consumers. This trend is hazardous for customers and societies. To sum up, I do strongly believe that famous brand products selling well demonstrate the progress of society. However, every consumer should according to their practical situations to choose the goods, following the trend blindly is inadvisable.
There has been a growing trend toward purchasing garments, vehicles, and accessories from
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expensive
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brand
names for a variety of reasons these days. Although this issue might not be of significant concerns of society, spending money for these external materials is fraught with pitfalls and its reasons should
be identified
in order to find solutions.

There are several causes why
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people
nowadays
are driven
to
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buy
luxury
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products
.
First
, since high-priced
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products
are
usually
of
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good
quality,
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many
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people
,
especially
successful millennials, tend to spend a considerable amount of money for these
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goods
.
For example
, the likelihood of a leather hand-made bag to last for a long time is
significantly
higher than an inexpensive one coming from a flea market as the materials that are
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used
would
usually
be ensured
in both quality and durability. Second, having
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expensive
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brand
names
is considered
a
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must to
express individuality and status. This means that society could
easily
associate owning an
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expensive
item with a successful figure since
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only
the wealthy ones could afford these items, which is
highly
beneficial in expanding relationship networks.

In fact, it cannot
be denied
that overbuying
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famous
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brand
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products
, such as clothes, towels and tooth paste may have
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some
drawbacks. These daily necessities are easy to worn or
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use
up and the quality of
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cheap
necessities is similar to that
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expensive
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goods
. Even buying
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famous
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brand
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products
all the time may cause children’s
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bad
style of life.
Moreover
, real and excellent
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famous
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brands
are limited
, while with more and more
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people
choose to
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buy
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famous
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brands
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goods
, sellers
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make
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use
of high technology producing
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some
fake
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famous
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brand
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products
to consumers. This trend is hazardous for customers and societies.

To sum up, I do
strongly
believe that
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famous
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brand
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products
selling well demonstrate the progress of society.
However
, every consumer should according to their practical situations to choose the
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goods
, following the trend
blindly
is inadvisable.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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