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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items from famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.1

More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items from famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 1
Nowadays, purchasing items such as cars or clothes from famous brands is becoming increasingly popular among a large number of people. The reasons behind this trend will be outlined in the following essay and, in my opinion, it could bring both positive and negative consequences in equal measure. To begin with, the tendency of using large brand products mostly stems from people’s beliefs on personal possessions reflecting wealth, social status, and appearance. More specifically, many people associate clothes and accessories from popular brand names such as Nike or Adidas with high quality and fashionable designs. Therefore, these items are more suitable for enhancing people’s appearance than the products from smaller brands. In addition, some types of goods like cars from luxurious brands are usually sold at exorbitant prices because of their expensive materials or unique features. Hence, these items are often considered as a tool for the rich to show off their social status or their wealth. On the other hand, more people purchasing goods from famous brands can bring both merits and drawbacks to the business world. Countries where famous brands are based are more likely to have a strong and healthy economy. For instance, the US – the home country of many large brands, such as Apple and Microsoft, has been the strongest economic superpower since the late 20th century partly since the products of these enterprises are favored not only in domestic but also in foreign markets. However, the rise of dominant brand names can be a factor leading to monopoly as large companies will attempt to dominate and finally wipe out smaller rivals to maintain their positions. In conclusion, the tendency of consuming goods from famous brands largely comes from people’s perception of personal belongings showing their wealth, social status and appearance. This trend can bring both positive and harmful effects to the business market and, therefore, should be well-considered by the government to prevent largescale monopoly.
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large
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people
. The reasons behind this trend will
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positive
and
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consequences in equal measure.

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brand
products
mostly
stems from
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people’s
beliefs on personal possessions
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wealth, social status, and appearance. More
specifically
,
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many
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people
associate clothes and accessories from popular
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brand
names such as Nike or Adidas with high quality and fashionable designs.
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, these items are more suitable for enhancing
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people’s
appearance than the products from smaller
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brands
.
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,
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some
types of
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goods
like cars from luxurious
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usually
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because
of their expensive materials or unique features.
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considered as a tool for the rich to
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their social status or their wealth.

On the other hand
, more
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purchasing
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goods
from
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famous
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brands
can bring both merits and drawbacks to the business world. Countries where
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famous
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brands
are based
are more likely to have a strong and healthy economy.
For instance
, the US
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–
the home country of
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many
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large
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brands
, such as Apple and Microsoft, has been the strongest economic superpower since the late 20th century partly since the products of these enterprises
are favored
not
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in domestic
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also
in foreign markets.
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, the rise of dominant
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brand
names can be a factor leading to monopoly as
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large
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companies
will attempt to dominate and
finally
wipe out smaller rivals to maintain their positions.

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, the tendency of consuming
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famous
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brands
largely
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comes
from
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people’s
perception of personal belongings showing their wealth, social status and appearance. This trend can bring both
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positive
and harmful
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to the business market and,
therefore
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government
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IELTS essay More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items from famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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