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More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Therefore there is no longer any need to print books, magazines or newspapers. v.1

More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Therefore there is no longer any need to print books, magazines or newspapers. v. 1
In the past, only limited ways were available to access information such as newspaper, magazine and so on. In modern scenario, with the passage of time and advancement in technology use of electronic gadgets is increasing rapidly in order to access information. Despite this, it is agreed that in the foreseeable future print media will disappear and computer, mobile phones will be used by masses because computer provides fast, convenient service as well as accurate information. Firstly, accessing information online provides us comfort as masses can use it at anyplace and anytime within few seconds. For instance, today with the help of search engine like Google, Bing and so on accessing information has become more convenient than the past. Individuals just need to enter a keyword in search box about one particular object and whole the information will be in the front of their eyes within seconds like if anybody enters Apple iPhon Google search box then whole the detail of establishing apple company and products will be on their smartphone screen. Thus, this makes it clear that print media is not going to be operational anytime in the near future. Secondly, on print media getting latest information is slow rather than electronic devices. For example, a few months ago when Malaysian airplane was crashed then information about it was available on the same day on the internet as well as television but on print media, it was available after one day. Moreover, on Wikipedia individual can get information about past centuries and about every celebrity, which is tough to find in print media and showing information by Wikipedia is accurate and really tough to deny. In summary, electronic gadget helps masses to keep updated with the latest invention. Thus, it is a clear use of print media in order to access information is an idea that will not be realised anytime soon. It is predicted that print media will be replaced by these devices.
In the past,
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only
limited ways were available to access
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information
such as newspaper, magazine and
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so
on. In modern scenario, with the passage of time and advancement in technology
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use
of electronic gadgets is increasing
rapidly
in order to access
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information
. Despite this, it is
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agreed
that in the foreseeable future
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print
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media
will disappear and computer, mobile phones will be
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used
by masses
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because
computer provides
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fast
, convenient service
as well
as accurate information.

Firstly
, accessing
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information
online provides us comfort as masses can
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use
it at anyplace and anytime within few seconds.
For instance
,
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today
with the
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help
of search engine like Google, Bing and
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so
on accessing
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information
has become more convenient than the past. Individuals
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just
need to enter a keyword in search box about one particular object and whole the
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information
will be in the front of their eyes within seconds like if anybody enters Apple
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iPhon
Google search box then whole the detail of establishing apple
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company
and products will be on their smartphone screen.
Thus
, this
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makes
it
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clear
that
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print
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media
is not going to be operational anytime in the near future.

Secondly
, on
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print
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media
getting
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latest
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information
is slow
rather
than electronic devices.
For example
, a few months ago when Malaysian airplane
was crashed
then
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information
about it was available on the same day on the internet
as well
as television
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but
on
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print
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media
, it was available after one day.
Moreover
, on Wikipedia individual can
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get
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information
about past centuries and about every celebrity, which is tough to find in
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print
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media
and showing
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information
by Wikipedia is accurate and
really
tough to deny.

In summary, electronic gadget
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helps
masses to
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keep
updated with the latest invention.
Thus
, it is a
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clear
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use
of
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print
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media
in order to access
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information
is an
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idea
that will not be
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realised
anytime
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soon
. It
is predicted
that
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print
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media
will
be replaced
by these devices.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Therefore there is no longer any need to print books, magazines or newspapers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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