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More and more people think that there is no need for printed paper newspapers. To what extend do you agree or disagree. v.3

After some years, people will not anymore face the need of buying books, printed newspapers or magazines, because the online network will be so developed that they could freely be able to read and gather all of the information needed online without paying a penny. I fully agree that in the near future the paper resource of information which is currently the main one, will be replaced by the easier and more convenient online method. Firstly, printed newspapers and books are no longer up-to-date, nowadays. Due to Corona virus, people have been obliged to stay particularly at their homes, which has led to times more people consuming information from online news, rather than from the traditional paper resources. What’s more is that everyone is aware that the information on the internet is more efficient, as well as better represented and organised. For example, you can find whatever you want on the net just with one click of your mouse and it doesn’t depend on which sphere of life your search concerns. Whilst if your newspaper is about horse riding, but you want to check the newest models of cars on the global market, it’s impossible to do so and then you have to buy another newspaper about cars, meaning few dollars more. Secondly, the present’s trend in recycling and acting in a more eco-friendly way will for sure reduce the producing of paper, including both books and newspapers, which, on the other hand, will increase their online version demand. For this reason every kind of paper-delivered information will be replaced by information delivered online through our computers and telephones. For instance, one step further of the eco-friendly people’s mind could be the usage of online students books saved in pdf format, instead of the commonly spread paper books. Not only this, but the fact that almost every school this year is working online, with students attending all of their classes through the network, gives us a clear need for more online information than the paper-delivered. In conclusion, I think that if we take the time machine and go into the far future, we shouldn’t be surprised if we see people using the internet as the only source of information, without any kind of need for buying newspapapers which cost money.
After
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some
years,
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people
will not
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anymore
face the need of buying
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books
, printed
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newspapers
or magazines,
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because
the
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online
network will be
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so
developed that they could
freely
be able to read and gather
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all of the
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information
needed
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online
without paying a penny. I
fully
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agree
that in the near future the paper resource of
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information
which is
currently
the main one, will
be replaced
by the easier and more convenient
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online
method.

Firstly
, printed
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newspapers
and
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books
are no longer up-to-date, nowadays. Due to
The term “Coronavirus” (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona virus
,
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people
have
been obliged
to stay
particularly
at their homes, which has led to times more
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people
consuming
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information
from
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online
news,
rather
than from the traditional paper resources. What’s more is that everyone is aware that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
on the internet is more efficient,
as well
as better represented and
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organised
.
For example
, you can find whatever you want on the net
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just
with one click of your
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
mouse and
it doesn’t depend on which sphere of life your search concerns. Whilst if your
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newspaper
is about horse riding,
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but
you want to
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check
the newest models of cars on the global market, it’s impossible to do
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so and
then you
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have to
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buy
another
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newspaper
about cars, meaning few dollars more.

Secondly
, the present’s trend in recycling and acting in a more eco-friendly way will for sure
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reduce
the producing of paper, including both
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books
and
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newspapers
, which,
on the other hand
, will increase their
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online
version demand.
For this reason
every kind of paper-delivered
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information
will
be replaced
by
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information
delivered
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online
through our computers and telephones.
For instance
, one step
further
of the eco-friendly
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people’s
mind could be the usage of
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online
students
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books
saved in
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pdf
format,
instead
of the
commonly
spread paper
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books
. Not
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only
this,
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but
the fact that almost every school this year is working
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online
, with students attending all of their classes through the network, gives us a
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clear
need for more
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online
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information
than the paper-delivered.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that if we take the time machine and go into the far future, we shouldn’t
be surprised
if we
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see
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people
using the internet as the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
source of
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information
, without any kind of need for buying
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newspapapers
which cost money.
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IELTS essay In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
6.0
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