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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v.6

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 6
Increasing numbers of individuals are dependent on their own vehicles, as means of travelling. There are several problems that are encountered due to over-reliance nonetheless there is a solution for the same. Every human being on the planet wishes to own a car in his lifetime. People sometimes are able to afford more than one automobile. The basic purpose of the vehicle is to transport a person from one place to the other. Although with increasing finance in a family there is a demand for more. For example: husband, and wife have individual cars while travelling to their workplace. Public transport is looked down upon due to the time spent waiting for it to arrive. Private vehicles allow personal space, which is of utmost importance to mankind. Nevertheless, traffic is caused due to umpteen amounts of cars on the road. In addition, parking space is limited for office-goers hence they park on the street. This creates an obstruction of other vehicles passing by. Unlike the bus at the depot, or a train at the station, cars do not have specified place. Even though people value their space, dependence on their vehicle is a matter of debate. The solution to combat this problem is either do car-pooling, or take public transport. In car-pool; an individual can take three of his colleagues along the same route while they exchange turns. On the other hand, the local transport is the lifeline of any city. Even if, cars were to break down these mighty fellows would seldom do. In conclusion, it is vital that we have our own commodities, but use them wisely.
Increasing numbers of individuals are dependent on their
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own
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vehicles
, as means of travelling. There are several problems that
are encountered
due to over-reliance nonetheless there is a solution for the same.

Every human being on the planet wishes to
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own
a
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car
in his lifetime.
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People
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
are able to afford more than one automobile. The basic purpose of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicle
is to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
a person from one place to the other. Although with increasing finance in a family there is a demand for more.
For example
: husband, and wife have individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
while travelling to their workplace. Public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
is looked
down upon due to the time spent waiting for it to arrive. Private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
personal space, which is of utmost importance to mankind.
Nevertheless
, traffic
is caused
due to umpteen amounts of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
on the road.
In addition
, parking space
is limited
for office-goers
hence
they park on the street. This creates an obstruction of other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
passing by. Unlike the bus at the depot, or a train at the station,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
do not have specified place.
Even though
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
value their space, dependence on their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicle
is a matter of debate.

The solution to combat this problem is either do car-pooling, or take public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
. In car-pool; an individual can take three of his colleagues along the same route while they exchange turns.
On the other hand
, the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
is the lifeline of any city. Even if,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
were to break down these mighty fellows would seldom do.

In conclusion
, it is vital that we have our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
commodities,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them
wisely
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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