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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 5
Transportation has become a basic human need like food, shelter, and accommodation. With the development of humanity, transportation has grown considerably too. Every mode of travelling is available at people's disposal, but, their inclination is more towards private cars. The luxuries offered by cars are enough to allure travellers, however, its catastrophic outcomes should not be neglected at any cost. To begin with the causes, the root of this problem is convenience. Since travelling is quite tiring, therefore people choose private cars over any other mode for making their journeys pleasant and comfortable. Furthermore, the dilapidated condition and services of public transport are aggravating the situation. As public transport is unable to provide on-time service assurance because of the breaking down of public vehicles, so people do not have any other choice rather than relying on cars. The impressions of over-dependence on cars are horrifying. The main effects of the soaring number of cars are traffic gridlock and road casualties. As the current road infrastructure is unable to handle the on-road vehicles efficiently, thus people are wasting their valuable time in traffic jams, which leads drivers to drive recklessly and cause accidents. Apart from it, poor air quality is another outcome of this phenomenon. Excessive utilization of cars not only deteriorate air quality index, but also make people suffer from several cardiovascular afflictions and showing them grave earlier than expected. Some corrective measures can help humanity in cleaning the mess created by the over-exploitation of cars. A complete makeover of public transport is the need of the hour, which have to include round the clock services and safety of passengers. Then only a substantial reduction can be brought in the management of cars. Another viable solution is to opt for telecommuting so that the urge to travel gets diminished. To conclude, the luxuries offered by cars are enough to allure travellers, however, its catastrophic outcomes should not be neglected at any cost. Both society and authority have to come up with effective tactics to alleviate the drastic effects of it.
Transportation has become a basic human need like food, shelter, and accommodation. With the development of humanity, transportation has grown
considerably
too. Every mode of travelling is available at
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people
's disposal,
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but
, their inclination is more towards private
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cars
. The luxuries offered by
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cars
are
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enough
to allure
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travellers
,
however
, its catastrophic outcomes should not
be neglected
at any cost.

To
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begin
with the causes, the root of this problem is convenience. Since travelling is quite tiring,
therefore
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people
choose private
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cars
over any other mode for making their journeys pleasant and comfortable.
Furthermore
, the dilapidated condition and services of
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public
transport are aggravating the situation. As
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public
transport is unable to provide on-time service assurance
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because
of the breaking down of
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public
vehicles,
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so
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people
do not have any other choice
rather
than relying on cars.

The impressions of over-dependence on
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cars
are horrifying. The main effects of the soaring number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
are traffic gridlock and road casualties. As the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
road infrastructure is unable to handle the on-road vehicles
efficiently
,
thus
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people
are wasting their valuable time in traffic jams, which leads drivers to drive
recklessly
and cause accidents. Apart from it, poor air quality is another outcome of this phenomenon. Excessive utilization of
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cars
not
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only
deteriorate air quality index,
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but
also
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make
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people
suffer from several cardiovascular afflictions and showing them grave earlier than
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expected
.

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Some
corrective measures can
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help
humanity in cleaning the mess created by the over-exploitation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
. A complete makeover of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport is the need of the hour, which
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have to
include round the clock services and safety of passengers. Then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a substantial reduction can
be brought
in the management of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
. Another viable solution is to opt for telecommuting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the urge to travel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
diminished.

To conclude
, the luxuries offered by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to allure
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
,
however
, its catastrophic outcomes should not
be neglected
at any cost. Both society and authority
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with effective tactics to alleviate the drastic effects of it.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 5

Essay
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5 paragraphs
340 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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