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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience v.3

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. 3
Nowadays, majority of the people prefers personal vehicle over public transport as their prime mode of travel. However, the increasing traffic is causing serious issues on the roads from a hike in accidents to long hours of jams. In this essay, I will discuss a prominent problem regarding the use of private cars and a practical remedy to resolve the prevailing situation. There is no doubt that people drive personal cars for self-comfort and it fixes the dependency over public transport. As more people are relying on personal vehicles, the excessive number of cars is causing air pollution and affecting the environment adversely. For instance, in winters, the smoke gets mixed with the fog and produces smog that lowers down the visibility, leading to massive accidents and loss of lives. Moreover, the smog is not like a usual fog that vanishes with the onset of sunlight, it remains in the environment for longer duration and results in respiratory problems as well. Therefore, the rising number of cars is degrading the environment rapidly. Over-reliance is a rising threat of modern society and the government should take initiatives. The public transport facilities should be strengthening in the inaccessible areas and more emphasis to commute through them. For illustration, new routes should be constructed so that people can take benefit of it and less dependent on their vehicles. This will help is reducing traffic on roads and air pollutants as well. Also, companies should provide incentives on public transportation instead of reimbursing for the fuel expenses. In general, reducing the dependency is in our hands and everyone should give his/her contribution. In conclusion, though personal vehicles elevate comfort but we are murdering the environment and risking our health. Different alternatives should be explored in commutation. Hence, over dependency is causing serious problems and there is a need for immediate action.
Nowadays,
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majority of
the
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people
prefers
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personal
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vehicle
over
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public
transport as their prime mode of travel.
However
, the increasing traffic is causing serious issues on the roads from a hike in accidents to long hours of jams. In this essay, I will discuss a prominent problem regarding the
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use
of private
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cars
and a practical remedy to resolve the prevailing situation.

There is no doubt that
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people
drive
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personal
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cars
for self-comfort and it
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fixes
the dependency over
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public
transport. As more
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people
are relying on
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personal
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vehicles
, the excessive number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
is causing air pollution and affecting the
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environment
adversely
.
For instance
, in winters, the smoke
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gets
mixed with the fog and produces smog that lowers down the visibility, leading to massive accidents and loss of
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lives
.
Moreover
, the smog is not like a usual fog that vanishes with the onset of sunlight, it remains in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
for longer duration and results in respiratory problems
as well
.
Therefore
, the rising number of
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cars
is degrading the
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environment
rapidly
.

Over-reliance is a rising threat of modern society and the
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government
should take initiatives. The
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public
transport facilities should be strengthening in the inaccessible areas and more emphasis to commute through them. For illustration, new routes should
be constructed
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so
that
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people
can take benefit of it and less dependent on their
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vehicles
. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
is reducing traffic on roads and air pollutants
as well
.
Also
,
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companies
should provide incentives on
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public
transportation
instead
of reimbursing for the fuel expenses.
In general
, reducing the dependency is in our hands and everyone should give his/her contribution.

In conclusion
, though
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personal
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vehicles
elevate comfort
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but
we are murdering the
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environment
and risking our health.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Different
alternatives should
be explored
in commutation.
Hence
, over dependency is causing serious problems and there is a need for immediate action.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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