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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v.2

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 2
Every house has a car in olden days. But now a day, every person in a house has a car. People are using the cars for their prestige not for the need. Private cars are the preferable for own transport. However, there is noticed problems with owning cars as well. In this essay, I will explain about the problems and possible solutions for that problem. Air pollution is one of the problems in the metro cities in all over the countries. Most of the people saying cars are comfortable for transport. It would work for a limited number of the cars. Whenever the limit exceeds traffic jam will occur on the roads. To avoid traffic people are taking unused roads and it leads to the accidents. Due to these innocent people are more suffering than actual persons. For example, recently in the Hyderabad accident because of a car driver mistake pedestrian died where he is safe in the car I would like to suggest, the Government has to take necessary action to increase the public transport on time. And the passengers have to take alternate transport when they are going alone in the car. Car pooling is also one of the best ideas to avoid collisions and pollution. Instead of going one person in a car he can give rides for another three persons along with him. So that we can minimize the count like Delhi is an eminent city in the pollution in all over the India. Recently the government has asked their people to use the car only on alternate days. In conclusion, based on the traffic conditions in the city and pollution people and the government has to make a decision to get change in the society to trust the car is only for the need and not for the prestige.
Every
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house
has a
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car
in olden days.
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But
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now
a day, every
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person
in a
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house
has a
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car
.
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People
are using the
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cars
for their prestige not for the need. Private
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cars
are the preferable for
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own
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transport
.
However
, there
is noticed
problems with owning
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cars
as well
. In this essay, I will
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explain
about the problems and possible solutions for that problem.

Air
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pollution
is one of the problems in the metro cities in all over the countries. Most of the
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people
saying
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cars
are comfortable for
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transport
. It would work for a limited number of the
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cars
.
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Whenever
the limit exceeds traffic jam will occur on the roads. To avoid traffic
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people
are taking unused roads and it leads to the accidents. Due to these innocent
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people
are more suffering than actual
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persons
.
For example
, recently in the Hyderabad accident
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because
of a
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car
driver mistake pedestrian
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died
where he is safe in the car

I would like to suggest, the
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Government
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has to
take necessary action to increase the public
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transport
on time. And the passengers
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have to
take alternate
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transport
when they are going alone in the
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car
.
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Car
pooling is
also
one of the best
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ideas
to avoid collisions and
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pollution
.
Instead
of going one
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person
in a
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car
he can give rides for another three
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persons
along with him.
“So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So that
we can minimize the count like Delhi is an eminent city in the
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pollution
in all over the India. Recently the
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government
has asked their
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people
to
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use
the
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car
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only
on alternate days.

In conclusion
, based on the traffic conditions in the city and
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pollution
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people
and the
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government
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has to
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make
a decision to
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get
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change
in the society to trust the
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car
is
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only
for the need and not for the prestige.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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