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More and more newspapers and news channels are using photographs to support their news articles and stories Some people think photographs are not a reliable source of news while others consider photographs to be irrefutable Discuss both sides and give you v.1

More and more newspapers and news channels are using photographs to support their news articles and stories Some people think photographs are not a reliable source of news while others consider photographs to be irrefutable 1
Presently, there is an abundance of prepackaged foods and frozen entrees involve preservatives and chemicals for consumers to ingest. This essay will show the underprivileged of this outweigh the advantages. The essay will first demonstrate the commodious to consume and preserve foods continuously, followed by an analysis of how prepackaged and frozen foods impair the consumer's health gradually. The main reason which consumers habitually consume prepackaged and ready-foods are convenient in the purchase and ingest them. Compared with other types of foods, repackaged meal can be found anywhere, located in every fast-food chain, with an inexpensive cost. Hence, consumption is quicker and effortless. To illustrate, great nations, including America, Britain, China, where the percentage of fast-food consumption per day is gigantic, approximately 58%, 46%, 60%, respectively, additionally, the analysis light out the fact that every three adults, there is one ingest prepackaged meal regularly. Furthermore, prepackaged and frozen foodstuff can preserve continuity. The seller can freeze the meal continuously, protect entree with preservatives to longer the food's living, when it is necessary, microwave them, and prepare for the next meal. The drawback to this said that prepackaged and frozen meal can impair health gradually. Many of report and statistics were recorded that consume prepackaged food is the main cause of a variety of dangerous diseases including cardiovascular disease, obesity, and cancer. It is said that in developed countries, every four adults, there are two who have heart failure, and every five children, there are two who have obesity at the second level. On balance, the fact that prepackaged and frozen meal impairs the consumer's health outweighs the advantage of preserving and consume food.
Presently
, there is an abundance of prepackaged
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foods
and
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frozen
'entrees' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "entrées"
entrees
involve preservatives and chemicals for consumers to ingest. This essay will
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show
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the underprivileged of
this outweigh the advantages. The essay will
first
demonstrate the commodious to
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consume
and preserve
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foods
continuously
, followed by an analysis of how prepackaged and
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frozen
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foods
impair the consumer's health
gradually
.

The main reason which consumers
habitually
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consume
prepackaged and ready-foods are convenient in the
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purchase
and ingest them. Compared with other types of
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foods
, repackaged
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meal
can
be found
anywhere, located in every
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fast
-food chain, with an inexpensive cost.
Hence
, consumption is quicker and effortless. To illustrate, great nations, including America, Britain, China, where the percentage of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
-food consumption per day is gigantic, approximately 58%, 46%, 60%,
respectively
,
additionally
, the analysis light out the fact that every three adults, there is one ingest prepackaged
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meal
regularly
.
Furthermore
, prepackaged and
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frozen
foodstuff can preserve continuity. The seller can freeze the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
continuously
, protect
'entree' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "entrée"
entree
with preservatives to longer the food's living, when it is necessary, microwave them, and prepare for the
next
meal.

The drawback to this said that prepackaged and
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frozen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
can impair health
gradually
.
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Many
of report and statistics
were recorded
that
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consume
prepackaged
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food
is the main cause of a variety of
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dangerous
diseases including cardiovascular disease, obesity, and cancer. It
is said
that in
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developed countries
, every four adults, there are two who have heart failure, and every five children, there are two who have obesity at the second level.

On balance, the fact that prepackaged and
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frozen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
impairs the consumer's health outweighs the advantage of preserving and
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consume
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food
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay More and more newspapers and news channels are using photographs to support their news articles and stories Some people think photographs are not a reliable source of news while others consider photographs to be irrefutable 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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