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More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v.3

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3
Big organisations give permission to the employees to work from their living place, which is a really major benefit, as it reduces wasting time of travelling to work place. In my opinion, there are a lot of advantages that cover the drawbacks of this idea, because the workers will be more comfortable. Firstly, saving the unused time of an employee will, consequently, increase the work time, thus, more tasks can be done. For example, if an employee spends one hour daily to go to work in unusually heavy traffic, especially, in the rush hours when all employees go to their work places and students travel to their schools, he will not perform with full concentration and may miss any of his tasks, so decreasing this time will be beneficiary for completing a huge number of tasks ion the same day. Moreover, increasing the convenience of the employees will reflect on making a productive, effective work, because the passion and loyalty of them will increase towards their firm. For instance, a particular company relies mainly on sales and marketing have to make the salesmen more comfortable to think out of the box and create new ideas to attract more customers, thus, the revenue of the company will increase, which raises the capitals of this organisation. To summarize, minimizing the waste time and increasing the comfortability for workers will have a really positive effect on work, whole company, and also the employer. Furthermore, the reputation of the company will increase in the market, that will attract more candidates to apply on any vacant.
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organisations
give permission to the
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employees
to
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work
from their living place, which is a
really
major benefit, as it
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reduces
wasting
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time
of travelling to
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work
place. In my opinion, there are
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a lot of
advantages that cover the drawbacks of this
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idea
,
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because
the workers will be more comfortable.

Firstly
, saving the unused
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time
of an
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employee
will,
consequently
,
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increase
the
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work
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time
,
thus
, more tasks can
be done
.
For example
, if an
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employee
spends one hour daily to go to
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work
in
unusually
heavy traffic,
especially
, in the rush hours when all
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employees
go to their
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work
places and students travel to their schools, he will not perform with full concentration and may miss any of his tasks,
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so
decreasing this
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time
will be beneficiary for completing a huge number of tasks ion the same day.

Moreover
, increasing the convenience of the
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employees
will reflect on making a productive, effective
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work
,
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because
the passion and loyalty of them will
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increase
towards their firm.
For instance
, a particular
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company
relies
mainly
on sales and marketing
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have to
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make
the salesmen more comfortable to
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think
out of the box and create new
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ideas
to attract more customers,
thus
, the revenue of the
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company
will
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increase
, which raises the capitals of this
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organisation
.

To summarize
, minimizing the waste
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time
and increasing the
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comfortability
for workers will have a
really
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positive
effect on
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work
, whole
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company
, and
also
the employer.
Furthermore
, the reputation of the
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company
will
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increase
in the market, that will attract more candidates to apply on any vacant.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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