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More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v.4

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4
Nowadays it has been observed that most of the organisations have given flexibility to their workers of telecommunication. It is the work arrangement in which an employee can connect from home without coming to an office on a daily basis. Personally, I believe the benefits of this approach outweigh its drawbacks. There are many reasons why telecommunication has more advantages than working from an office. Firstly, It gives an opportunity to an employee to work according to his or her comfort. A person need not to travel every day, so it saves a lot of time. In this way, a person can give more focus and attention to his family. Therefore, work life balance in this kind of working approach is better. Secondly, employers save a lot of money, as they need not to give travel allowance to their employees who work regularly from home. Moreover, it also helps employers to save the cost on the resources like computer, printers and office space. Finally, employers are able to hire talented people across the globe, which is only possible because of this approach. On the other hand, this approach has some demerits. In this contemporary era, it has become very important to give employees face to face professional training and workshops on the latest technologies and keep them updated, so that they can use those modern technologies in the company's projects. However, this is not always possible in this type of working environment. Moreover, the meeting takes a lot of time if a person has an internet connectivity issue at home. Furthermore, sometimes due to personal issues work, is hampered in this application. All in all, I opine that in this contemporary era time is an important factor. Hence, every organisation should have an option for their employees for connecting from their home.
Nowadays it has
been observed
that most of the
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organisations
have
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given
flexibility to their workers of telecommunication. It is the
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work
arrangement in which an
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employee
can connect from home without coming to an office on a daily basis.
Personally
, I believe the benefits of this approach outweigh its drawbacks.

There are
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many
reasons why telecommunication has more advantages than working from an office.
Firstly
, It
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gives
an opportunity to an
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employee
to
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work
according to
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his or her
comfort. A person need not
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to travel
every day,
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so
it saves
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a lot of
time. In this way, a person can
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give
more focus and attention to his family.
Therefore
,
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work life
balance in this kind of working approach is better.
Secondly
, employers save
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a lot of
money, as they need not to
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give
travel allowance to their
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employees
who
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work
regularly
from home.
Moreover
, it
also
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helps
employers to save the cost on the resources like computer, printers and office space.
Finally
, employers are able to hire talented
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people
across the globe, which is
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only
possible
because of this
approach.

On the other hand
, this approach has
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some
demerits. In this contemporary era, it has become
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very
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important
to
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give
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employees
face to face professional training and workshops on the latest technologies and
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keep
them updated,
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so
that they can
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use
those modern technologies in the
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company
's projects.
However
, this is not always possible in this type of working environment.
Moreover
, the meeting takes
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a lot of
time if a person has an internet connectivity issue at home.
Furthermore
,
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sometimes
due to personal issues
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work
,
is hampered
in this application.

All in all, I opine that in this contemporary era time is an
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important
factor.
Hence
, every
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organisation
should have an option for their
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employees
for connecting from their home.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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