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More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v.5

More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v. 5
In todays world, use of the technology in interacting for official purpose as well as for the general interaction has been drastically increasing not only in financial organisation, but also in the common people rather than meeting together personally. This essay will discuss the advantages as everything will on a record and protect them against cheating as well as discuss' the disadvantages such as formation of communication gap and therefore makes individuals lazy. On one hand, the profit of communicating in the form of mails, chats and from other sources helps each and every information and data to get recorded. As this type of method is beneficial, especially for companies who deal with ample of clients, therefore avoiding confusion and malpractice. Furthermore, social media also helps to advertise the organisation and their products. For instance, if clients have promised to deliver the materials on particular data and failed to do so, there will be strong evidence to question him. Along with this, individuals have a lot of benefit as this helps to share the information using this social media additionally then interact remotely because of their busy life. On the other hand, Even though technology plays a vital role in communication, a gap arises due to lack facial interaction. Through this medium particular ideology or feelings cannot be expressed effectively, which have tendencies to damage strong relationship. In addition to this, because of this internet people are getting lazy and showing less interest to meeting each other. For example, a survey conducted by an internet research organization disclosed that individuals are more interested to hang out or chat in social media sites like Facebook and Instagram rather than meeting also. Moreover, people are getting health issues because of spending more time on electronic devices. Finally, this essay has discussed the advantages that every conversation can be noted, in addition, social media helps in marketing strategies. Alternatively, it also discussed the negatives like as people are becoming lazy and not showing interest in meeting personally.
In
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todays
world,
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use
of the technology in interacting for official purpose
as well
as for the general interaction has been
drastically
increasing not
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only
in financial
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organisation
,
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but
also
in the common
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people
rather
than
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meeting
together
personally
. This essay will discuss the advantages as everything will on a record and protect them against cheating
as well
as discuss' the disadvantages such as formation of communication gap and
therefore
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makes
individuals lazy.

On one hand, the profit of communicating in the form of mails, chats and from other sources
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helps
each and every information and data to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
recorded. As this type of method is beneficial,
especially
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
who deal with ample of clients,
therefore
avoiding confusion and malpractice.
Furthermore
,
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social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
to advertise the
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organisation
and their products.
For instance
, if clients have promised to deliver the materials on particular data and failed to do
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so
, there will be strong evidence to question him. Along with this, individuals have
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a lot of
benefit as this
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helps
to share the information using this
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social
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media
additionally
then interact
remotely
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because
of their busy life.

On the other hand
,
Even though
technology plays a vital role in communication, a gap arises due to lack facial interaction. Through this medium particular ideology or feelings cannot
be expressed
effectively
, which have tendencies to damage strong relationship.
In addition
to this,
because of this
internet
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people
are getting lazy and showing less interest to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
each other.
For example
, a survey conducted by an internet research
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organization
disclosed that individuals are more interested to hang out or chat in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
sites like Facebook and Instagram
rather
than
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meeting
also
.
Moreover
,
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people
are getting health issues
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of spending more time on electronic devices.

Finally
, this essay has discussed the advantages that every conversation can
be noted
,
in addition
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
in marketing strategies.
Alternatively
, it
also
discussed the negatives like as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are becoming lazy and not showing interest in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
personally
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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