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More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v.3

More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v. 3
It is an irrefutable fact that the mode of communication has changed enormously with the advent of the internet. People prefer to use different technologies while communicating instead of having a face to face conversation. This essay will explain the positive and negative aspects of online communication. One of the most important advantages of using technology is that it helps to cross the geographical barrier. For instance, a person sitting in India can contact his European clients instantly using email or Skype. This can be beneficial for the expansion of his business as he can interact with people from all over the world. Moreover, this way of interaction helps to reduce a lot of overheads like travel expenses and the cost incurred for setting up a meeting destination. On the flip side, excessive dependence on communication technologies has its own disadvantages. To begin with, people lose the personal connect / connection when they refrain from face to face communication. This can make them feel lonely and depressed as they are devoid of social life and it can have a detrimental effect on their mental health. Furthermore, chances of fraud increase when we converse via phone or email, as we cannot verify the physical identity of the person we are interacting / conversing with. To conclude, though technology has made communication easier and more convenient, there are numerous disadvantages as well if it is used excessively. So the mode of communication should be chosen judiciously taking into account several factors such as distance and time
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communication
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changed
enormously
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prefer to
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use
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different
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technologies
while communicating
instead
of having a
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face
to
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face
conversation. This essay will
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explain
the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of online communication.

One of the most
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important
advantages of using
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technology
is that it
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helps
to cross the geographical barrier.
For instance
, a person sitting in India can contact his European clients
instantly
using email or Skype. This can be beneficial for the expansion of his business as he can interact with
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people
from all over the world.
Moreover
, this way of interaction
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helps
to
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reduce
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a lot of
overheads like travel expenses and the cost incurred for setting up a meeting destination.

On the flip side, excessive dependence on
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communication
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technologies
has its
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own
disadvantages. To
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begin
with,
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people
lose the personal connect / connection when they refrain from
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face
to
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face
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communication
. This can
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make
them feel lonely and depressed as they are devoid of social life and it can have a detrimental effect on their mental health.
Furthermore
, chances of fraud increase when we converse via phone or email, as we cannot verify the physical identity of the person we are interacting / conversing with.

To conclude
, though
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technology
has made
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communication
easier and more convenient, there are numerous disadvantages
as well
if it is
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used
excessively
.
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So
the mode of
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communication
should
be chosen
judiciously
taking into account several factors such as distance and
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time
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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