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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. v. 1
It is the conundrum for the government that where to spend money, building new public facilities such as museum and town halls or to renovate existing ones. As per my view, preserving and maintaining ancient public places is more needful than availing new public building. Two primitive reasons for this are: Renovate existing places is cost-effective solution for many world’s governments, Old places often have it’s own historical values. To begin with, redeveloping museums and town halls proved to be a cheaper solution than building new public places from scratch, for the developing countries’ government. Once these places renovated properly, they look like a new one and even within allocated budget. For instance, the Brazilian government has renovated all the monuments of the Rio city instead public demand for setting up new recreational facilities, because of steep financial resources. The government contemplated that the actual spending is only 3 percent compared to the plan of creating new public buildings. Additionally, republicans also admiring this step from the government afterward. This example clarifies that why spending on preservation of the existing places is so important, in terms of limited financial options. Consequently, old places have a strong connection with respective countries culture and history. Many world’s cities are known as heritage cities by it’s ancient buildings. In this way, people’s name and history attached with those places and thus emotions is also the key factor for the government to put more focus on reinventing existing places than creating new ones, even if the government is financially capable to build new places. For example, the Indian government believed in maintaining old building in Delhi as it depicts Indian culture and history of the popular personalities. Many of the city’s monuments named after famous national persons, kings of old time, and politicians. In fact, though, the Indian government is too financially healthy to build new places, the government prefers to renovate old ones. To conclude, by describing both the points I can say that it is not only necessary for countries’ government to save their financial resources in order to preserve old places but also important for them to preserve historical values and culture of their own country.
It is the conundrum for the
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government
that where to spend money,
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building
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new
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public
facilities such as museum and town halls or to renovate
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existing
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ones
. As per my view, preserving and maintaining ancient
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public
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places
is more needful than availing
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new
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public
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building
. Two primitive reasons for this are: Renovate
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existing
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places
is cost
-effective solution for
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many
world’s
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governments
,
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Old
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places
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often
have
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it’s
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own
historical values.

To
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begin
with, redeveloping museums and town halls proved to be a cheaper solution than
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building
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new
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public
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places
from scratch, for the developing
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countries’
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government
. Once these
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places
renovated
properly
, they look like a
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new
one and even within allocated budget.
For instance
, the Brazilian
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government
has renovated all the monuments of the Rio city
instead
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public
demand for setting up
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new
recreational facilities,
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because
of steep financial resources. The
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government
contemplated that the actual spending is
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only
3 percent compared to the plan of creating
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new
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public
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buildings
.
Additionally
, republicans
also
admiring this step from the
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government
afterward. This example clarifies that why spending on preservation of the
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existing
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places
is
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so
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important
, in terms of limited financial options.

Consequently
,
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old
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places
have a strong connection with respective
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countries
culture and history.
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Many
world’s
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cities
are known
as heritage
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cities
by it’s ancient
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buildings
. In this way,
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people
’s name and history attached with those
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places
and
thus
emotions is
also
the key factor for the
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government
to put more focus on reinventing
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existing
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places
than creating
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new
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ones
, even if the
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government
is
financially
capable to build
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new
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places
.
For example
, the Indian
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government
believed in maintaining
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old
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building
in Delhi as it depicts Indian culture and history of the popular personalities.
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Many
of the city’s monuments named after
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famous
national persons, kings of
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old
time, and politicians. In fact, though, the Indian
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government
is too
financially
healthy to build
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new
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places
, the
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government
prefers to renovate
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old
ones.

To conclude
, by describing both the points I can say that it is not
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only
necessary for
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countries’
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government
to save their financial resources in order to preserve
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old
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places
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but
also
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important
for them to preserve historical values and culture of their
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own
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country
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
63Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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