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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both the industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v.1

In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both the industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v. 1
The environment on mother earth has been declined due to the radical growth of industries and infrastructure in developing countries, which result in an extreme level of air and water pollution. All of these issues can be resolved by taking corrective actions such as appropriate management of industrial waste, separate dump yards in order to dispose an industrial leftover etc. The air pollution can be tackled with implementing laws introduced by the government authorities to minimize air pollution. To begin with, since last five decades industry revolution transformed the whole world. The majority of the nations were influenced and set them into the race in order to develop and stabilize their industries and infrastructure. All over the toxic waste from industries and construction businesses were disposed into rivers, oceans and air which result in high pollution of water resources and air globally. For instance, a survey conducted by BBC news in Asia and the American continent shows tremendous levels of depletion of air and water quality which is badly affected the humans as well as wildlife. Nevertheless, contamination issues of air and water could be resolved by taking proper steps such as separating industrial sites from residential areas. Disposal of an industrial toxic waste into dump yards instead of rivers and oceans that can be treated further to minimize pollution. Defining and applying environmental laws which will definitely help to reduce pollution levels. The marvellous example of industry standards generally known as industry 2. 0 introduced by the UK in 1976 and followed globally, which clearly illustrate that with proper planning of industrial areas, application of environmental laws can minimize the pollution levels approximately by 60%. To conclude, the industrial revolution, especially in developing countries, polluted the air and water quality immensely. However, we found and applied ways to limit pollution with significant steps.
The environment on mother earth has
been declined
due to the radical growth of
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industries
and infrastructure in
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developing countries
, which result in an extreme
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level
of
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air
and
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water
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pollution
. All of these issues can
be resolved
by taking corrective actions such as appropriate management of
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industrial
waste, separate dump yards in order to dispose an
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industrial
leftover etc. The
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air
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pollution
can
be tackled
with implementing laws introduced by the
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government
authorities to minimize
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air
pollution.

To
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begin
with, since last five decades
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industry
revolution transformed the whole world. The majority of the nations
were influenced
and set them into the race in order to develop and stabilize their
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industries
and infrastructure. All over the toxic waste from
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industries
and construction businesses
were disposed
into rivers, oceans and
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air
which result in high
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pollution
of
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water
resources and
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air
globally.
For instance
, a survey conducted by BBC news in Asia and the American continent
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shows
tremendous
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levels
of depletion of
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air
and
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water
quality which is
badly
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affected
the humans
as well
as wildlife.

Nevertheless
, contamination issues of
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air
and
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water
could
be resolved
by taking proper steps such as separating
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industrial
sites from residential areas. Disposal of an
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industrial
toxic waste into dump yards
instead
of rivers and oceans that can
be treated
further
to minimize
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pollution
. Defining and applying environmental laws which will definitely
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help
to
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reduce
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pollution
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levels
. The
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marvellous
example of
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industry
standards
generally
known as
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industry
2. 0 introduced by the UK in 1976 and followed globally, which
clearly
illustrate that with proper planning of
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industrial
areas, application of environmental laws can minimize the
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pollution
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levels
approximately by 60%.

To conclude
, the
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industrial
revolution,
especially
in
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developing countries
, polluted the
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air
and
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water
quality
immensely
.
However
, we found and applied ways to limit
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pollution
with significant steps.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both the industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this? v. 1

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