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" Money is wasted on space exploration as compared to basic needs of human". Give your views. v.2

" Money is wasted on space exploration as compared to basic needs of human". Give your views. v. 2
As the technology advances day by day, various innovations and inventions are takes place in the society. One of them is exploration of space. Exploration of space means to enquire about space, whether the life on space is possible or not, whether the necessities of life are available or not. This essay delves into both the views before coming to its own opinion. Generally, the country who spends astronaumical on the exploration of space, then it is one of the main characteristic of developed country. This feature also helps in exchanging technologies in between the countries which helps in building cordial relations between the countries. All of this leads to generation of employment. To exemplify, in India, there is one space centre, named after Indian scientist, Satish Dhawan Space Centre. This centre is operated by Indian Space Research Organisation. In this contemporary epoch, it has two satellite launch pads. So, this is one of the biggest achievement of India. On the flip side of coin. instead of spending huge funds on these kind of projects, Government should spend their funds on providing the basic amenities and facilities to its residents. It is also true that for being a developed country, Government must not waste its single penny on the extravagance activities. Rather it may provide food, cloth and house to the poor at the subsidised rates. Moreover, Government should spend its funds on roads, railways, education, infrastructure and so on. Spending Government funds on the projects like space exploration is a huge waste of money due to various reasons. One of them is if any satellite launch fails then all the money, time and efforts go in vain. Even, sometimes human resource also have to suffer. From the arguments one can conclude that for the more development of the country, the projects like space exploration plays a crucial role. But, the Government should give its priority to the basic facilities and amenities of the public includes food, clothes and shelter.
As the technology advances day by day, various innovations and inventions are takes place in the society. One of them is
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exploration
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space
.
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of
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space
means to
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enquire
about
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space
, whether the life on
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space
is possible or not, whether the necessities of life are available or not. This essay delves into both the views
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before
coming to its
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own
opinion.

Generally
, the
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country
who spends
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astronaumical
on the
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exploration
of
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space
, then it is one of the main characteristic of developed
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country
. This feature
also
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helps
in exchanging technologies in between the
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countries
which
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helps
in building cordial relations between the
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countries
. All of this leads to generation of employment. To exemplify, in India, there is one
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space
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centre
, named after Indian scientist,
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Satish
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Dhawan
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Space
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Centre
. This
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centre
is operated
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. In this contemporary epoch, it has two satellite launch pads.
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, this is one of the biggest achievement of India.

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instead
of spending huge funds on
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these kind
of projects,
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should spend their funds on providing the basic amenities and facilities to its residents. It is
also
true that for being a developed
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country
,
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Government
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must
not waste its single penny on the extravagance activities.
Rather
it may provide food, cloth and
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house
to the poor at the
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subsidised
rates.
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,
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should spend its funds on roads, railways, education, infrastructure and
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so
on. Spending
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Government
funds on the projects like
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space
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exploration
is a huge waste of money due to various reasons. One of them is if any satellite launch fails then all the money, time and efforts go in vain. Even,
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sometimes
human resource
also
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have to
suffer.

From the arguments one can conclude that for the more development of the
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country
, the projects like
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space
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exploration
plays a crucial role.
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But
, the
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Government
should give its priority to the basic facilities and amenities of the public includes food, clothes and shelter.
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IELTS essay " Money is wasted on space exploration as compared to basic needs of human". Give your views. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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