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a new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today? v.1

a new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today? v. 1
The latest generations of entrepreneurs suggest that the most innovative and exciting development in tourism is considered to be privately funded space travel. In my opinion, I believe that space tourism can be nowadays an original solution for those who love to explore the world to discover new places. Focusing on the main subject, space tourism, I highly agree with entrepreneurs. The world we now live in, being in constant evolution and development, request an equal amount of innovative ideas not only in economy or technology but also in free-time activities like travel. I believe that the most fulfilling experience a human can have is discovering the world around us, but why not go further? With the appropriate means of transport, I assume that lots of people would treasure to go explore what's beyond the world. Researchers and engineers are already looking forward to creating a spaceship that can be used for personal luxury travel around the universe. Of course, this will completely change the way we observe space travels. If only, lesser than one hundred years ago, people looked at space journeys as an impossible dream, they are now realistically considering the idea of booking a "ticket to the infinite”. However, these voyages will be so expensive that the majority of people will not have the possibility to try this extravagant experience. Despite everything, it may be possible that in a long-term future people will be able to discover and find out fascinating characteristics about planets and galaxies, raising the contemporary knowledge in this field.
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is considered
to be
privately
funded
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space
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travel
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space
tourism can be nowadays an original solution for those who
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love
to explore the
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world
to discover new places.

Focusing on the main subject,
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space
tourism, I
highly
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agree
with entrepreneurs. The
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world
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now
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in economy or technology
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in free-time activities like
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travel
. I believe that the most fulfilling experience a human can have is discovering the
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world
around us,
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but
why not go
further
? With the appropriate means of transport, I assume that lots of
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people
would treasure to go explore what's beyond the
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world
. Researchers and engineers are already looking forward to creating a spaceship that can be
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used
for personal luxury
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travel
around the universe.

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, this will completely
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change
the way we observe
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space
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travels
. If
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only
, lesser than one hundred years ago,
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people
looked at
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space
journeys as an impossible dream, they are
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now
realistically
considering the
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idea
of booking a
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ticket to the infinite”.
However
, these voyages will be
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so
expensive that the majority of
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people
will not have the possibility to try this extravagant experience.

Despite everything, it may be possible that in a long-term future
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people
will be able to discover and find out fascinating characteristics about planets and galaxies, raising the contemporary knowledge in this field.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay a new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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