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The Hierarchy of NeedsAbraham Maslow developed the theory of the human being’s “Hierarchy of Needs. ” He created a pyramid of basic human needs. At the lowest level are basic survival needs such as food and shelter. If a person satisfies that level, v.1

The Hierarchy of NeedsAbraham Maslow developed the theory of the human being’s “Hierarchy of Needs. ” He created a pyramid of basic human needs. At the lowest level are basic survival needs such as food and shelter. If a person satisfies that level, v. 1
AS PER THE NATURE'S LAW, NO ONE HAS A CONTROL OVER ANYTHING AROUND THE WORLD. NONETHELESS, NOT RECOGNIZING AT EARLYER CAN BE EXPENSIVE CONSEQUENTLY, THE HIGH COST OF RESEARCH AND CURING PROCEDURES. HENCE, SOME FEEL THAT BETTER TO STOP AT EARLY THAN BEING LATE. FIRSTLY THIS ESSAY WILL50 % CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE STATEMENT DUE TO VARIOUS REASONS AND SECONDLY, DISCUSS THE IMPORTANCE OF PREVENTIVE WAYS. LASTLY, THE REASONS BEHIND THE HUGE EXPENCE OF WHOLE PROCEDURE FROM START TO END AFTER INITIAL PERIOD. ON THE ONE HAND, THE PRIME ESSENTIAL CONCERN OF TREATING THE DISEASE AT INITIAL PERIOD IS THE EXPENSE ASSOCIATED WITH IT. IT JUST COST THEM A PENY INSTEAD OF LARGE AMOUNT OF MONEY. THIS WIL DECLINE THE FINANCIAL BURDEN AND INDIVIDUAL CAN EFFORTLESSLY AFFORD THE TREATMENT. AS A RESULT, THERE WOULD BE DROP IN THE NUMBER OF DEATHS AMONG HUMEN DUE TO THE MEDICAL PROBLEM. FOR EXAMPLE, 90% OF GINGIVITIS CAN BE PREVENTED DUE TO THE PRIMIARY MEASURES TAKEN BY THE FOLKS IN THE SUBURB AREA AS THEY ARE EDUCATED AND HAVE CONCERN ABOUT THE HEALTHY LIFE. ON THE OTHER HAND, INTERMIDIATE OR SEVERE DISEASES DEMAND THE NEWER TECHNOLOGY. BECAUSE, MACHIN'S PARTS ARE BEING IMPORTED FROM THE FOREIGN COUNTRY AND THEY TAKE CUISTOME CHARGE ALMOST DOUBLE OF THE ACTUAL RATE. HENCE, THE MIDDLE CLASS AND IMPOVERISHED CIVILIAN OF TH DEVELOPING NATIONS COULD NOT AFFORD THE TREATEMENT. FOR INSTANCE, AS PER THE INDIAN DATA OF THE THE MACHINS REPORTS REVEALED THAT THE BLOOD PRESSURE MACHINE IMPORT CHARGE IS ALMOST DOUBLE THAN ORIGINAL PRICE OF THE PRODUCT. THEREFORE, THE RETAILD INCREASE THE PRICE DURING SELLING. HOWEVER, TO RECOGNISE THE PROBLEM AS INITIAL STAGE NEEDS A FUNDAMENTAL INFORMATION ABOUT THE DISEASE THAT IS LACK IN THE GENERAL CITIZENS. THIS PUT THEM TO UNINFORMED, AND THE DISEASE POGRESSED FURTHER AND REACHED TO LAST STAGE. IN CONCLUSION, THE PREVENTION INDEED REDUCE THE TREATMENT COST IF RECONGNISED AT EARLY STAGE. THIS STEP REQUIRE THE AUHORITY SUPPORT AND INDIVIDUAL INTEREST OF BEING HELATHY. THUS, I SUGGESTS, FIRST MAKE FOLKS AWARE OF THE COMMON MEDICAL PROBLEN INFORM THEM ABOUT HOW TO INHIBIT THE FURTHER DEVELOPMENT OF SUCH DISEASES.
AS PER THE NATURE'S LAW, NO ONE HAS A CONTROL OVER ANYTHING AROUND THE WORLD. NONETHELESS, NOT RECOGNIZING AT
EARLYER
CAN BE EXPENSIVE
CONSEQUENTLY
, THE HIGH COST OF RESEARCH AND CURING PROCEDURES.
HENCE
,
SOME
FEEL THAT BETTER TO
STOP
AT EARLY THAN BEING LATE.
FIRSTLY
THIS ESSAY WILL50 % CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE STATEMENT DUE TO VARIOUS REASONS AND
SECONDLY
, DISCUSS THE IMPORTANCE OF PREVENTIVE WAYS.
LASTLY
, THE REASONS BEHIND THE HUGE
EXPENCE
OF WHOLE PROCEDURE FROM
START
TO
END
AFTER INITIAL PERIOD.

ON THE ONE HAND, THE PRIME ESSENTIAL CONCERN OF TREATING THE
DISEASE
AT INITIAL PERIOD IS THE EXPENSE ASSOCIATED WITH IT. IT
JUST
COST THEM A
PENY
INSTEAD
OF LARGE AMOUNT OF MONEY. THIS
WIL
DECLINE THE FINANCIAL BURDEN AND INDIVIDUAL CAN
EFFORTLESSLY
AFFORD THE TREATMENT.
AS A RESULT
, THERE WOULD BE DROP IN THE NUMBER OF DEATHS AMONG
HUMEN
DUE TO THE MEDICAL PROBLEM.
FOR EXAMPLE
, 90% OF GINGIVITIS CAN BE
PREVENTED
DUE TO THE
PRIMIARY
MEASURES TAKEN BY THE FOLKS IN THE SUBURB AREA AS THEY
ARE EDUCATED
AND HAVE CONCERN ABOUT THE HEALTHY LIFE.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
INTERMIDIATE
OR SEVERE
DISEASES
DEMAND THE NEWER TECHNOLOGY.
BECAUSE
,
MACHIN
'S PARTS ARE
BEING IMPORTED
FROM THE FOREIGN COUNTRY AND THEY TAKE
CUISTOME
CHARGE ALMOST DOUBLE OF THE ACTUAL RATE.
HENCE
, THE MIDDLE
CLASS
AND IMPOVERISHED CIVILIAN OF TH DEVELOPING NATIONS COULD NOT AFFORD THE
TREATEMENT
.
FOR INSTANCE
, AS PER THE INDIAN DATA OF
THE THE
MACHINS
REPORTS REVEALED THAT THE BLOOD PRESSURE MACHINE IMPORT CHARGE IS ALMOST
DOUBLE
THAN ORIGINAL PRICE OF THE PRODUCT.
THEREFORE
, THE
RETAILD
INCREASE THE PRICE DURING SELLING.

HOWEVER
, TO
RECOGNISE
THE PROBLEM AS INITIAL STAGE NEEDS
A FUNDAMENTAL INFORMATION
ABOUT THE
DISEASE
THAT IS
LACK IN THE GENERAL CITIZENS. THIS PUT THEM TO UNINFORMED, AND THE
DISEASE
POGRESSED
FURTHER
AND REACHED TO LAST STAGE.

IN CONCLUSION
, THE PREVENTION
INDEED
REDUCE
THE TREATMENT COST IF
RECONGNISED
AT EARLY STAGE.
THIS STEP REQUIRE
THE
AUHORITY
SUPPORT AND INDIVIDUAL INTEREST OF BEING
HELATHY
.
THUS
, I
SUGGESTS
,
FIRST
MAKE
FOLKS AWARE OF THE COMMON MEDICAL
PROBLEN
INFORM THEM ABOUT HOW TO INHIBIT THE
FURTHER
DEVELOPMENT OF SUCH
DISEASES
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The Hierarchy of NeedsAbraham Maslow developed the theory of the human being’s “Hierarchy of Needs. ” He created a pyramid of basic human needs. At the lowest level are basic survival needs such as food and shelter. If a person satisfies that level, v. 1

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