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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation? v.5

Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation? v. 5
Nowadays technological development in different sectors changed human's daily life. Among that current technological device such as personal computer and internet allow individuals to work at home atleast part time without going to an office daily. Tjis essay will discuss the pros and cons of this new practice. To commence with, the foremost advantage of this system is the flexible and stree free working hours. The employee can enjoy the freedom of scheduling the time to work and also individuals could complete their activities according to their creative way without any pressure from supervisor or manager. In addition to that, working from home helps to save time to finish their job on time. For example, people who are living from far away from their work place can utilise the time of travelling to work and hence they can improve in their job field. On the other hand, the major disadvantages of this method is that the employees lack certain work skills such as cooperation, punctuality, tolerance and so on. Working together with others provides confidence to handle difficult assignments which is essential for an individual whereas work at home will not cater. Moreover, even though office distractions are avoided, household matters may stole the concentration in work. For instance, people who are working from home easily get disturbed by domestic activities that brings unsuccessful results. To conclude, the advantage and disadvantage of doing job at home using modern technology can be considered as two sides of a coin. The advantages include flexibility and time consumption and the disadvantages are lack in work skill and domestic distractions.
Nowadays technological development in
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different
sectors
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changed
human's daily life. Among that
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current
technological device such as personal computer and internet
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allow
individuals to
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work
at home
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atleast
part
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time
without going to an office daily.
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Tjis
essay will discuss the pros and cons of this new practice.

To commence with, the foremost advantage of this system is the flexible and
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stree
free
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working
hours. The employee can enjoy the freedom of scheduling the
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time
to
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work
and
also
individuals could complete their activities according to their creative way without any pressure from supervisor or manager.
In addition
to that,
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working
from home
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helps
to save
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time
to finish their job on
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time
.
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,
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people
who are living from far away from their
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work
place can
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utilise
the
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time
of travelling to
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work
and
hence
they can
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improve
in their job field.

On the other hand
, the major disadvantages of this method is that the employees lack certain
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work
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skills
such as cooperation, punctuality, tolerance and
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so
on.
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Working
together with others provides confidence to handle difficult assignments which is essential for an individual whereas
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work
at home will not cater.
Moreover
,
even though
office distractions
are avoided
, household matters may stole the concentration in
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work
.
For instance
,
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people
who are
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working
from home
easily
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get
disturbed by domestic activities that brings unsuccessful results.

To conclude
, the advantage and disadvantage of doing job at home using modern technology can
be considered
as two sides of a coin. The advantages include flexibility and
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time
consumption and the disadvantages are lack in
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work
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skill
and domestic distractions.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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