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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation? v.3

Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation? v. 3
Technology has changed the way we work. The advent of the internet and networking solutions has made it possible for people to work from their home instead of their offices. In my opinion, this development has more advantages than disadvantages. Perhaps the biggest advantage is that people can work flexible hours. This arrangement is especially helpful for women who have young children. Many of them who quit their job after the birth of their children are now back in the job market. Obviously, they are looking for positions that allow them to work from their homes. Male employees also benefit from working from home. In big cities like Mumbai or Bangalore, people spend hours commuting to work and home. If they get an opportunity to work from their home, they can save a lot of time. This will improve their work-life balance and overall sense of wellbeing. Employers also benefit from this arrangement. When employees work from their homes, the cost of running the business comes down. Working from home also saves valuable resources. Less commuting means less travel. This can result in significant fuel savings and cleaner air. There are a few challenges as well. Employees working from home may have difficulty building a rapport with others in their team. In addition, they may find it difficult to get instant support when problems arise. However, an efficient management can easily take care of these problems. To conclude, there are several benefits to working from home. Many employers have already realized this and started encouraging their workers to work from home. In the future, we will certainly have more organizations taking this route.
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the way we
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. The advent of the internet and networking solutions has made it possible for
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people
to
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work
from their home
instead
of their offices. In my opinion, this development has more advantages than disadvantages.

Perhaps the biggest advantage is that
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people
can
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work
flexible hours. This arrangement is
especially
helpful for women who have young children.
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Many
of them who quit their job after the birth of their children are
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now
back in the job market.
Obviously
, they are looking for positions that
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allow
them to
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work
from their homes.

Male employees
also
benefit from
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working
from home. In
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big
cities like Mumbai or Bangalore,
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people
spend hours commuting to
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work
and home. If they
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get
an opportunity to
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work
from their home, they can save
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a lot of
time. This will
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improve
their work-life balance and
overall
sense of
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wellbeing
. Employers
also
benefit from this arrangement. When employees
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work
from their
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homes
, the cost of running the business
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comes
down.
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Working
from home
also
saves valuable resources. Less commuting means less travel. This can result in significant fuel savings and cleaner air.

There are a few challenges
as well
. Employees
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working
from home may have difficulty building a rapport with others in their team.
In addition
, they may find it difficult to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
instant support when problems arise.
However
, an efficient management can
easily
take care of these problems.

To conclude
, there are several benefits to
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working
from home.
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Many
employers have already realized this and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
encouraging their workers to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home. In the future, we will
certainly
have more organizations taking this route.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
273 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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