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Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives bow than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society. v.2

Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives bow than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society. v. 2
In this modern age, medical science is growing rapidly with highly innovative and technological system, which is introduced in all over the country. Medical science is referred to identify the diseases and cure it by producing medicines, machinery and equipments and operation strategy with professional skill doctors. However, I strongly believe with that the medical science is playing a vital role in individual unhealthy person' s life. Even though, there are some benefits and drawbacks in the medical science field. On the one hand, the medical science sector is giving new life to survive for debilitate patients by researching medicines in order to cure for serious diseases like heart attack, cholesterol, Cancer, pneumonia, asthma and much more. Moreover, with the help from those medicines and equipments, it not only gives a prolong life expectancy, also at the same they can spend some more time with their family members. Furthermore, those unfit people can do something for their family. For instance, life insurance can be considered as a good example. On the other hand, Although highly advance equipments has manufactured and provided in the hospital sector by medical science industry in order to give more time period to survive, nevertheless at the same time sickly and critical health condition people are also have to move their life throughout physically and mentally ache. Moreover, especially medical science plays an essential role for elderly population because elderly people require much more medical care, such as, organ transplant, dialysis and vitamins. This consequence takes place at old age, when human body cannot function properly by itself with the past of time. Therefore, medical science is said to be as a legal process to use in an ethical way. To sum up, I personally agree with that there should be good quality machinery and equipment items as well as medicines. In an additional, at the same time there should be a good treatment in order to reduce body pain and anxiety for infirm people.
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is growing
rapidly
with
highly
innovative and technological system, which
is introduced
in all over the country.
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Medical
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science
is referred
to identify the diseases and cure it by producing medicines, machinery and
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equipments
and operation strategy with professional
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skill
doctors.
However
, I
strongly
believe with that the
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medical
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science
is playing a vital role in individual unhealthy
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life
.
Even though
, there are
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some
benefits and drawbacks in the
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medical
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science
field.

On the one hand, the
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medical
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science
sector is giving new
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life
to survive for debilitate patients by researching medicines in order to cure for serious diseases like heart attack, cholesterol, Cancer, pneumonia, asthma and much more.
Moreover
, with the
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help
from those medicines and
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equipments
, it not
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gives
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with their family members.
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can do something for their family.
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,
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life
insurance can
be considered
as a
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good
example.

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highly
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equipments
has manufactured and provided in the hospital sector by
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medical
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science
industry in order to give more
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period to survive,
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sickly and critical health condition
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people
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throughout
physically
and mentally ache.
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especially
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medical
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science
plays an essential role for elderly population
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because
elderly
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people
require much more
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medical
care, such as, organ transplant, dialysis and vitamins. This consequence takes place at
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old
age, when human body cannot function
properly
by itself with the past of
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time
.
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,
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medical
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science
is said
to be as a legal process to
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use
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in an ethical way
.

To sum up, I
personally
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agree
with that there should be
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good
quality machinery and
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equipment
items
as well
as medicines. In an additional, at the same
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time
there should be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
treatment in order to
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reduce
body pain and anxiety for infirm
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people
.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases. This is one reason that people are living longer lives bow than they did in the past. Discuss the effects this might have on society. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
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