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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? v.1

Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? v. 1
It is generally argued that parent can make their own decision of immunizing their children or not immunizing children from deadly diseases. In this view, Childhood vaccines or immunizations can seem overwhelming with parent. From my perspective, it must not to optional and all children are obligated to vaccinate. This essay will discuss the benefits of vaccine injection and the major of vaccine in society. Parents want to do everything possible to make sure their children are healthy and protected from preventable diseases. Vaccinations not only protect children from fatal diseases, such as polio, chickenpox, and diphtheria, but they also keep other children safe by eliminating or greatly decreasing dangerous diseases that used to spread from child to child. For instance, according to Ph. D. Vivian Chou, Rubella had a massive number of people who were infected in 1969. However, the number is dropdown dramatically after the licensing of the rubella vaccine. As a society, it is important to protect human from deadly diseases. The more people who are vaccinated, the fewer opportunities a disease has spread. While vaccines are very effective at preventing disease, no medication is 100% effective. Fortunately, most people who get vaccinated do get full protection from disease. However, a very small percentage of people who are vaccinated may not get full immunity from the vaccine and may still be vulnerable if exposed to disease. On the other hand, some anti-vaccinationist believe in the immune system and natural remedies. For example, In China, there are many villages are following the natural medicines to cure illnesses. In summary, vaccination should be compulsory for all children and government should enforce a new policy to support vaccine injection.
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make
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own
decision of immunizing their
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children
or not immunizing
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children
from deadly
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diseases
. In this view, Childhood
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vaccines
or immunizations can seem overwhelming with parent. From my perspective, it
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must
not to optional and all
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children
are obligated
to vaccinate. This essay will discuss the benefits of
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vaccine
injection and the major of
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vaccine
in society.

Parents want to do everything possible to
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make
sure their
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children
are healthy and protected from preventable
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diseases
. Vaccinations not
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only
protect
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children
from fatal
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diseases
, such as polio, chickenpox, and diphtheria,
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but
they
also
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keep
other
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children
safe by eliminating or
greatly
decreasing
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dangerous
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diseases
that
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used
to spread from child to child.
For instance
, according to
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Vivian Chou, Rubella had a massive number of
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people
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who
were infected
in 1969.
However
, the number is dropdown
dramatically
after the licensing of the rubella vaccine.

As a society, it is
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important
to protect human from deadly
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diseases
. The more
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people
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who
are vaccinated
, the fewer opportunities a
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disease
has spread. While
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vaccines
are
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very
effective at preventing
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disease
, no medication is 100% effective.
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, most
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people
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who
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get
vaccinated do
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get
full protection from
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disease
.
However
, a
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very
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small
percentage of
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people
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who
are vaccinated
may not
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get
full immunity from the
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vaccine
and may
still
be vulnerable if exposed to
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disease
.
On the other hand
,
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some
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anti-vaccinationist
believe in the immune system and natural remedies.
For example
, In China, there are
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many
villages are following the natural medicines to cure illnesses.

In summary, vaccination should be compulsory for all
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children
and
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government
should enforce a new policy to support
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vaccine
injection.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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