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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. v. 2
In these days, people spend less time than they did in the past. Nowadays, it's easier to communicate with our friends or relatives. As a result, people are staying at home much more than the previous years and this causes negative effects on their social lives. It has both pros and cons. Let's talk about these pros and cons. . . Let's look at the pros. You can communicate faster and way more effortless by sending emails or messaging (texting) with your friends. On the other hand, it has cons too. Nowadays, friends usually keep in touch by sending emails and messages, but this way is decreasing the amount of meetings. For instance, teenagers prefer texting over the meeting, because it's much easier and you can do it while lying on your bed. In recent years, finding a reliable friend is one of the hardest things in life. Having a great social skill is incredibly important. Furthermore, meeting is the best way to find new friends or maintain the friendship. Online friendships are usually finishing early, because having an online friend is very easy, however this is a bad thing. Because you didn't talk in real life and also, you didn't know each other too well. Real friendship has to include in real life activities for me. In conclusion, emails and messages made our life easier, whereas they killed the social abilities and real friendships, because meetings are the most important thing for me. As a result, I prefer meeting over messaging all the time.
In these days,
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people
spend less time than they did in the past. Nowadays, it's easier to communicate with our
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friends
or relatives.
As a result
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people
are staying at home much more than the previous years and this causes
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negative
effects on their social
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lives
. It has both pros and cons.
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Let
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's look at the pros. You can communicate faster and way more effortless by sending emails or messaging (texting) with your
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friends
.
On the other hand
, it has cons too. Nowadays,
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friends
usually
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keep
in touch by sending emails and messages,
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but
this way is decreasing the amount of
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meetings
.
For instance
,
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teenagers
prefer texting over the
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meeting
,
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because
it's much easier and you can do it while lying on your bed.

In recent years, finding a reliable
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friend
is one of the hardest things in
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life
. Having a great social
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skill
is
incredibly
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important
.
Furthermore
,
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meeting
is the best way to find new
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friends
or maintain the
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friendship
. Online
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friendships
are
usually
finishing early,
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because
having an online
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friend
is
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however
this is a
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bad
thing.
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you didn't talk in
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real
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life
and
also
, you didn't know each other too well.
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Real
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friendship
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has to
include in
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real
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life
activities for me.

In conclusion
, emails and messages made our
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life
easier, whereas they killed the social abilities and
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real
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friendships
,
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because
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meetings
are the most
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important
thing for me.
As a result
, I prefer
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meeting
over messaging all the time.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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