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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.5

Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. with this statement? v. 5
Communications in the new era have evolved so much that there is no need for anyone to write letters anymore. I agree to a great extent with the above statement and I believe it has enabled humans to communicate more quickly and efficiently. With the changing time, there has been a rapid growth in technology which allowed us humans to carry out our day to day work with ease. One of the things is effective communication. With advancements in the communication system people no longer need to write letters and wait for days to get a reply. A cellular phone is one such advancement; it is easy to carry and has become the largest medium of communication for people around the world. Nowadays, with the help of a cell phone a person can communicate with others from one place to another. There are so many platforms for people to interact without any hassle such as emails, texts, voicemails, etc. Furthermore, these mediums are easy to use and they do the job within seconds, instead of the long wait. They also allow the person to share data instantly. For example: if a patient needs help and is unable to visit the doctor, he can just send him his reports through this and get his advice. In conclusion, it can be said that modern communication system is far more effective and with it in place there is no need for anyone to write letters.
Communications in the new era have evolved
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so
much that there is no
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need
for anyone to write letters anymore. I
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agree
to a great extent with the above statement and I believe it has enabled humans to communicate more
quickly
and
efficiently
.

With the changing time, there has been a rapid growth in technology which
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allowed
us humans to carry out our
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day to day
work with
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ease
. One of the things is effective
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communication
. With advancements in the
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communication
system
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people
no longer
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need
to write letters and wait for days to
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get
a reply. A cellular phone is one such advancement; it is easy to carry and has become the largest medium of
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communication
for
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people
around the world. Nowadays, with the
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help
of a cell phone a person can communicate with others from one place to another. There are
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so
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many
platforms for
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people
to interact without any hassle such as emails, texts, voicemails, etc.

Furthermore
, these mediums are easy to
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use and
they do the job within seconds,
instead
of the long wait. They
also
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allow
the person to share data
instantly
.
For example
: if a patient
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needs
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help
and is unable to visit the doctor, he can
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just
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send
him his reports through this and
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get
his advice.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that modern
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communication
system is far more effective and with it in place there is no
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need
for anyone to write letters.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. with this statement? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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