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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.11

Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. with this statement? v. 11
We do not have to keep in touch with envelopes, due to new and technological communication devices. I agreed that, this idea is both true and accurate. Nowadays, we're mostly using our mobile phones to talk with our friends or relatives. Firstly, these devices make our life much more comfortable and easy. It help us to send messages lighting fast, and also it reduces the amount of time that we're spending for writing. Moreover, we could not need to go to the post office for our content get reach to the person, who would receive. Furthermore, maybe our situation would be crucial, hence, our delivery must be quick and immediately. To illusturate that, one of our parent would be sick or in pain. For this reason, I support the usage of these modern devices. Secondly, utilization of these present-day communication ways contribute our planet. For instance, usage of these new methods are also reduce the deforestation rate. Additionally, recent researches which are done by conservationists and experts support that, the amount of tree usage has decreased rapidly throughout the decades as a result of the utilization of these new ways to communicate. I believed that, this reason just enough for us to use modern ways. In conclusion, as I mentioned, using the old communication methods like sending letters have several disadvantages and drawbacks, both for our planet and hours. I support that, humans should use technology to be helpful for our nature and gain time to create new, creative and efficient projects for the humanity.
We do not
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have to
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keep
in touch with envelopes, due to
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new
and technological communication devices. I
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agreed
that, this
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idea
is both true and accurate. Nowadays, we're
mostly
using our mobile phones to talk with our friends or relatives.

Firstly
, these devices
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make
our life much more comfortable and easy. It
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help
us to
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send
messages lighting
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fast
, and
also
it
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reduces
the amount of time that we're spending for writing.
Moreover
, we could not need to go to the post office for our content
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get
reach to the person, who would receive.
Furthermore
, maybe our situation would be crucial,
hence
, our delivery
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must
be quick and immediately. To
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illusturate
that, one of our parent would be sick or in pain.
For this reason
, I support the usage of these modern devices.

Secondly
, utilization of these present-day communication ways contribute our planet.
For instance
, usage of these
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new
methods are
also
Consider using a past participle here: "reduced".
reduce
the deforestation rate.
Additionally
, recent researches which
are done
by conservationists and experts support that, the amount of tree usage has decreased
rapidly
throughout the decades
as a result
of the utilization of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
ways to communicate. I believed that, this reason
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just
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enough
for us to
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use
modern ways.

In conclusion
, as I mentioned, using the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
communication methods like sending letters have several disadvantages and drawbacks, both for our planet and hours. I support that, humans should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
technology to be helpful for our nature and gain time to create
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
, creative and efficient projects for the humanity.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. with this statement? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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