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Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v.5

Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 5
Interestingly, most of the prominent jobs globally are executed by males. Some individuals think that the authorities need to interfere for categorising a certain percentage of these jobs to females. In this essay, I will discuss the merits and de-merits of categorising certain jobs for women and explain why it cannot be a good solution. In fact, there can be a lot of disadvantages of reserving seats for the ladies. Firstly, by setting aside places for the ladies, the deserving male candidates could lose their position, which could result in de-stabilising the organisation. Further, it could disrupt the transparency of the organisation. For example, it is widely known that the most of the global MNC's and government organisations do not have any form of reservation for keeping their system transparent. Secondly, by keeping aside seats for women, the lower skilled woman is getting engaged compared to their higher skilled male counterpart, which could result in the effectiveness and functionality of the institution. Hence, reserving seats for ladies can never be a great solution. On the other hand, there are a lot of advantages that can be gained by not setting aside seats for women or any other category, for that matter. It could not only bring skilled people to the upfront, irrespective of their gender difference, but also can bring about transparency and effectiveness in the work world. For instance, it is an accepted fact that people who are highly engaged with important tasks needs to be the ones who clearly knows how to devise strategies to implement it and have worked their way up. Additionally, by not reserving positions, it can motivate employees to work harder and reach the topmost position, which could drastically benefit the productivity of the company. To conclude, in my opinion, there are a lot of de-merits of reserving positions for women. Seats needs to be filled as per the market demand and the skill of the employee, rather than providing a platform for all genders to participate equally that could result in the disruption of the work culture.
Interestingly
, most of the prominent jobs globally
are executed
by males.
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Some
individuals
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think
that the authorities need to interfere for
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categorising
a certain percentage of these jobs to females. In this essay, I will discuss the merits and
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de-merits
of
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categorising
certain jobs for
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women
and
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explain
why it cannot be a
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good
solution.

In fact, there can be
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a lot of
disadvantages of
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reserving
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seats
for the ladies.
Firstly
, by setting aside places for the ladies, the deserving male candidates could lose their
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position
, which could result in
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de-stabilising
the
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organisation
.
Further
, it could disrupt the transparency of the
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organisation
.
For example
, it is
widely
known that the most of the global
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MNC
's and
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government
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organisations
do not have any form of reservation for keeping their system transparent.
Secondly
, by keeping aside
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seats
for
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women
, the lower skilled woman is getting engaged compared to their higher skilled male counterpart, which could result in the effectiveness and functionality of the institution.
Hence
,
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reserving
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seats
for ladies can never be a great solution.

On the other hand
, there are
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a lot of
advantages that can
be gained
by not setting aside
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seats
for
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women
or any other category, for that matter. It could not
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only
bring skilled
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people
to the upfront, irrespective of their gender difference,
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but
also
can bring about transparency and effectiveness in the work world.
For instance
, it is an
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accepted
fact that
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people
who are
highly
engaged with
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important
tasks needs to be the ones who
clearly
knows how to devise strategies to implement it and have worked their way up.
Additionally
, by not
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reserving
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positions
, it can motivate employees to work harder and reach the topmost
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position
, which could
drastically
benefit the productivity of the
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company
.

To conclude
, in my opinion, there are
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a lot of
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de-merits
of
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reserving
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positions
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
.
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Seats needs
to
be filled
as per the market demand and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
of the employee,
rather
than providing a platform for all genders to participate
equally
that could result in the disruption of the work culture.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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