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Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.3

Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. v. 3
It is undeniable truth that the ecosystem in all over the globe is dangerously affected by the exploitation of mankind. Some intellectuals opine that this practice will never change, whereas others consider that the preventive actions by human being could bring the positive results. This essay will discuss both the views, along with my opinion in the following paragraphs. To begin with, the former view, the unsustainable exploitation of natural resources is done by humans to fulfil their desires. Consequently, the people are not bothering about the detrimental impact on the indigenous plants and animals due to such activity. Moreover, the greedy nature of a human only focuses on their needs and prosperity instead of the surrounding creatures. For instance, the concrete jungle of human society had vanished many aboriginal plants and animals from their habitats. Thus, it is very hard to believe that the actions of mankind might change and restore the natural ecosystem. On the other hand, some people having an optimistic view consider that the people are also moving towards the developments by preserving natural habitats. Furthermore, such environment conscious people find their responsibility towards the nature and coexistent creatures. For example, in all the countries there are many national centuries are running effectively to preserve their indigenous plants and animals, which might get threatened in the past. As a result, the population of these plants and animals could be maintained for the balanced ecosystem and next generations. In conclusion, the damage done by the human community to the nature would not compensate by them; few preventive steps could improve the present scenario. In my opinion, the firm determination of all the citizens could help to restore the natural habitat and fruitful result can be gained in the future.
It is undeniable truth that the ecosystem in all over the globe is
dangerously
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affected
by the exploitation of mankind.
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Some
intellectuals opine that this practice will never
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change
, whereas others consider that the preventive actions by
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human
being could bring the
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positive
results. This essay will discuss both the views, along with my opinion in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the former view, the unsustainable exploitation of
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natural
resources
is done
by
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humans
to fulfil their desires.
Consequently
, the
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people
are not bothering about the detrimental impact on the indigenous
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plants
and
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animals
due to such activity.
Moreover
, the greedy nature of a
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human
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only
focuses on their needs and prosperity
instead
of the surrounding creatures.
For instance
, the concrete jungle of
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human
society had vanished
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many
aboriginal
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plants
and
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animals
from their habitats.
Thus
, it is
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very
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hard
to believe that the actions of mankind might
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change
and restore the
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natural
ecosystem.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
having an optimistic view consider that the
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people
are
also
moving towards the developments by preserving
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natural
habitats.
Furthermore
, such environment conscious
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
find their responsibility towards the nature and coexistent creatures.
For example
, in all the countries there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
national centuries are running
effectively
to preserve their indigenous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
, which might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
threatened in the past.
As a result
, the population of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
could
be maintained
for the balanced ecosystem and
next
generations.

In conclusion
, the damage done by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
community to the nature would not compensate by them; few preventive steps could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the present scenario. In my opinion, the firm determination of all the citizens could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to restore the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
habitat and fruitful result can
be gained
in the future.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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